Grandeza (Camp Kill Yourself Season 2)

[P. Mortuus]

Camp Kill Yourself Season 2
Grandeza Classic
Written By,Opus,and Tim

Opus.
Has anyone ever told you that blood smelt like rust?
Or that red, like blood, is the color of lust?
These aren't lies, they're facts indeed.
Much worse then the fiction that you bleed.
Much different from the lies she tells herself.
Welcome to Camp Kill Yourself.

Has anyone ever handed you a dream?
Telling to guard it to the extreme?
You've never had a dream at all.
Nothing for you to enthrall.
Much different then the dreams he holds himself.
Welcome to Camp Kill Yourself.

Have you ever held on to anything so tight?
So that no one may grasp it from your fist and flight?
No you haven't, you're too bleak.
You couldnt hold on to anything because you're too weak.
Much different then the memories she holds to herself.
Welcome to Camp Kill Yourself.

Have you ever been pushed down so hard?
Because you always let down your guard?
It's not a lie. It's a simple fact.
Everything around you abstract and intact.
Much different then the world he finds himself.
Welcome to Camp Kill Yourself.

Tim
Molested by the world thrown in an upheaval
Bounded by struggle and took refuge at the easel
Each brush stroke an arrow at the neck of authority
While common sense flexes biceps, a dissects society
No tears for prosperity, refuses to be a clone of a drone
Ready to fight accepted concepts, facing the world alone
Colors bleed into canvas, seeping through wounds, deep in core
Slashes rip to the surface eruptions on the ocean floor
A goal unclear, suffering seems the only result
Then a swipe of red enough kool-aid to drown a cult
A dab of aqua, tab of sea green gently the fluids bleed
Strikes with empathy, charging a full-force tsunami
No cares sympathy a mystery he refuses to solve
And as drops drip down tragedies slowly evolve
Orange and yellow, flames rip down from the skies
Red flows into brown, magma engulfs human lives
This culprit rarely seen converted by an ambiguous screen
Averted common means to exert his horrendous schemes
With a paintbrush mistaken a trident strikes with wealth
A place where time stands still
Welcome to Camp Kill Yourself

[P. Mortuus]

Links.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...se-356152.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...06#post6123206

[Broly]

Nice collab, imagery was really nice throughout the
whole piece as was the flow and emotion, really the
type of piece i can get into, and just imagine that
im there and experiencing everything..overall just a
great write, and opus - i liked how you ended each
of your verses with welcome to camp kill yourself
and how each verse was just a metaphor for that
and tim - great verse man, emotion was good as
was the flow, i really enjoyed this read, both of you
keep writing. And thank you for the read.


http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...an-357080.html
Please RTF on my piece.

[Shotty Fullclip]

this is definitely a dope piece, and you both killed it.. the imagery was fucking amazing, truthfully. the vocab was good, too, from both of you. it had incredible flow, fantastic. you both should do another soon. i enjoyed the read, and thank you, both. i'd say overall 10, cuz i really cant see this being spit any better.

[P. Mortuus]

Word dudes thanks for the feed and this is season two if you want to read season one let me know.

[.SuiGeneris.]

Opus. The concept has been you used repeatedly, but the approach you've took in a different 'narration' was dope. I like the emotion you've had in your part, very deph with so much meaning after every line.
Tim. Very Detailed and I loved your wording. Seems like both of you guys came different, different view point. Opus came with a good wording and intense emotion with meaning. Tim, he came with a dope detailed imagery, word-choices were good, the flow was out-standing. Overall this was a good collab. Both came good. Keep writing.

[P. Mortuus]

Word thanks.

[P. Mortuus]

Open for more feed guys.

[P. Mortuus]

Comeon.

[Pacino]

wow, amazing ending Tim. And great opening Opus.

The wording in it all was very strong as far as choices go. And fluently great as far as clever placement. The imagery of it all was just abstract and beautiful. Really nice job with your descriptives and similies. FLow was fluently clean. Never once did I stutter and it came out like a rap. Mainly due to the great rhymescheme. all in all a really nice read. Keep writing guys, loved it. hit up "Goodbye! Wonderland?" for me.

[Spoken]

This went off well and in retch respect was conplimented with both writers on one another....both knew what you were saying and both were in it to win it with ease writing and smooth flow along with knock out wording man... supremacy to me defines this piece as it shows "it only takes meaning and understanding to write off a read worth reading again with entertainment for ones ears man" bopth were great and i cant say enough since most has been said already but all i can say on my part was that this was a nice read and a nice way to continue a story and to keep one interested. big ups to you guys man.

[P. Mortuus]

Thanks to all please a little more feed and I'll put it to rest.

[million dollar man]

ill leave feed when i read season 1

[Ink Poyzin]

The flow in this was dope as fuck, from both of you.
The imagery in it was good. Overall it was a solid
piece, from both of you. Opus your style, it kinda
reminded me of this dude I used to know on
soundclick.com, or should I say... a song he did.
The name is WeRdHeRtZ and he did a song called
"What if".. well to get to the point, you wrote your
verse like him, very dope.. And to Tim, you had a great
style, too, man. You ripped it up, definitely. And your
imagery, it was fuckin' crazy. I liked it alot..
You both, you just blew it right up.. Keep on writin'..

[Ink Poyzin]

And I'd like to read season one, if you can hook me up..