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    "Please don't love me"

    A response to a poem she wrote for me. I'd share her poem to give a better insight into mines but I don't think she'd appreciate that.


    Honey bee,
    secluded delicacy;
    I've searched you
    felt you
    dwelled
    and have
    found too many reasons
    to graciously
    reject your request
    and keep loving you.
    I'm neither hero nor coward
    but I don't make promises
    that I cannot keep.
    And to me,
    every time
    that I say
    those three words
    I'm making a thousand
    devoted promises.
    I want to get lost in your labyrinth.
    I want to meet your monsters,
    I want to go through every door,
    I want to swim in your veins
    and find myself in your heart.
    I swear I see Elysium at your every step,
    so how can one say that the journey isn't worth it?
    If I were to let you go now
    Overcast would
    smother
    the morning light.
    Gorgeous pieces,
    shining fragments,
    you are too much
    for them to understand.
    Maybe your past lovers
    didn't know
    how to arrange a mosaic;
    you need care
    thought
    bravery
    a gentle hand
    and enough honesty
    to know that you
    are a masterpiece
    that has yet to be finished.
    When I read your words
    I amiably oblige
    to your honesty
    inspired by love.
    murder murder

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    Re: "Please don't love me"

    very dope and emotional piece. reading it just
    hurt my eyes going back and forth so damn much.
    LOL. but still you did a great job, man.. and i bet
    she really enoyed this as well.. good work..
    sorry the feed is so short but im in a rush..
    gotta go and pick my daughter up from daycare.

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    Re: "Please don't love me"

    i enjoyed your narrative approach on this. i am left in awe after reading the swim in your veins, and end in your heart lines. Great piece.

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    Re: "Please don't love me"

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...xn-357783.html
    Twixn & Cry... The People's Politics < hit on that beast.





    pretty weird love poem... so this was a response to a love poem wrote to you? I couldn't tell whether or not you loved her or if you were telling her that you didn't love her and she shouldn't love you... it was weird because there's a lot of areas in there saying how much you care and how much you enjoy her... then there were some areas like... I dunno, almost the opposite or hinting towards the opposite. very open piece... seems quickly done, but a good read no doubt. keep up man... and hit up mine and twix's ish....

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