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    Heroes Don't Exist.

    Heroes Don't Exist.
    By: Nash





    Heroes use to be men
    of distinguished nobility
    among other men.
    .
    .
    there isn't such a thing.


    A man fearful for an early death
    steals an old ladys bag, for
    doe to save the life of his friend.
    and then a "hero" reacts,
    but he actually just pretends
    that he got her purse back
    by handing an empty bag over
    but not her cash...
    and when I look at it sober -
    I see who commits the worst act.

    I sit and I grasp this clover
    and I hear people ask:
    "Where's the hope gone?"
    when that's exactly where it's at,
    because all the hope's gone.

    People act as if drugs didn't exist
    when really its presence is known.
    eventually, all of santas wish lists
    will most likely read: "A Home"
    yet still they don't get it...
    ONE... succeeded in digging a hole,
    and only the one can get back this -
    thing that they themselves stole.
    and still it's a distributer that is
    the users idea of a hero.

    What is peace was never real, but
    a figment of a junkies imagination.
    it's something we'll never feel
    `til we get through every frustration
    placed on an angry field.

    She's no angel - but to him she is.
    and while satans curves shake,
    the smoothe, beautifully dirty skin
    graces the eyes on his face.
    but it's clear she's only hurting him
    because his money can't buy her age.
    he cries out while his hero leaves in
    a hurry, stepping down from her cage.
    he's ugly, but does what he can
    to buy a heroic love in its place.

    Killing two birds with one stone, and
    we'll call the birds people,
    while cigarettes are the stones cast.
    so how is your mother your hero
    if her idea of a helping hand -
    means to keep your breaths low.


    and so...

    you search for heroes, but a good deed
    now only means ten more bad ones.
    a parents response to a hero would be
    that we were all bad once.


    Heroes use to be men
    of distinguished nobility
    among other men.
    .
    .
    there isn't such a thing.
    Last edited by Cody Nash; March 4th, 2008 at 05:03 AM

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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    fuck you all.

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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    thanks assholes.

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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    "fuck you all"......? haha.............
    but anyways this was a beautiful poem....very antagonistic and cynical.
    its good to see you write from that perspective.

    The title kinda draws you in....you wanna figure out what its about before you read the first line.
    It was a very original piece....

    I loved these lines:


    A man fearful for an early death
    steals an old ladys bag, for
    doe to save the life of his friend.
    and then a "hero" reacts,
    but he actually just pretends
    that he got her purse back
    by handing an empty bag over
    but not her cash...
    and when I look at it sober -
    I see who commits the worst act......

    it gave me a laugh......very cynical here...and I loved it.

    9/10.

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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    This was choppy has fuck,flowed horribley to be brutally honest, other than that it was a decent piece, sorry.
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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    dope shit, really. you finally used a concept that hasn't been used dozens of times, which really made this a great read. i personally loved the last few lines that weren't bolded. it put a different aspect of the world in motion, or maybe i'm just high? oh well, i liked it.

    liked how you put it as, if the hero comitted heroism for one person, he comitted shit for the person who was trying to get away with something.

    cool piece
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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    thanks jon. and fuck you poetria, seriously. your feedback on nearly everyone's pieces is like that now. brutally honest? you couldn't do half as good you fucking shit stain. stay the fuck away from me. you said mr writes piece (which EVERYONE loved) was shit... you're shit. and that's NOT being brutally honest. that's plain honest. want me to be brutally honest? fuck off.



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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    Thanks for speaking your mind , I can't help if your pieces just come off utterly boring, and as for write, he's your butt buddy. But anyway, I just feel that nobody on this site is that good, including me. I know I suck, i'll admit it. RB poetry sucks to the que. But hey, it's all good, I've just grasped poetry a bit, and am rather dissapointed with everything I have read lately, maybe it's because i've just felt lacking in everything lately, especially school. So I apologize, and im going to leave some good feed.
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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    This was a pretty interesting topic to say the least, I like the idea of this, I left a few complaints above, they were over-exaggerated. A few lines of good imagery every few stanzas. Pretty good piece, I actually enjoyed it.
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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    you're a smart ass you know that? upps...

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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    Sorry to post again, I wasn't meaning to be a smart-ass. I liked your piece upon a re-read. I honestly meant my apology, so hopefully we can get along.
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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    ^fuck you sir.




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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    Fuck that...

    This shit was dope. Seriously, I loved the simple vernacular and or language that you chose to use here. It made it relatively easy to follow and comprehend. There was no real guess work needed. And in this particular instance, I felt like that was a relief. Your message was simple and to the point. And the perspective you spoke through was very relatable and even made me think a bit. For the most part this was not an overly complex or insanely deep piece, however, it was extremely compelling and very well-written. I thought your word choice (upon second glance) was well thought-out and positioned. Your words flowed fluidly and the ideas behind them came across fluent. Plus, some of your content hit with emphasis and dramatic value. In my opinion, this was dope when you take the context of the concept into consideration; which basically means, I have no qualms with it at all. So good job man!



    Favorite Lines:

    Heroes use to be men
    of distinguished nobility
    among other men.
    .
    .
    there isn't such a thing.
    ^I thought the reoccurrence of these lines here, really brought some power and presences to your piece. Especially when it appeared at the end and the entire purpose of the poem was brought full-circle. It sort of summed it all up for me, in so many words or less.


    Also:

    A man fearful for an early death
    steals an old ladys bag, for
    doe to save the life of his friend.
    and then a "hero" reacts,
    but he actually just pretends
    that he got her purse back
    by handing an empty bag over
    but not her cash...
    and when I look at it sober -
    I see who commits the worst act.

    I sit and I grasp this clover
    and I hear people ask:
    "Where's the hope gone?"
    when that's exactly where it's at,
    because all the hope's gone.
    ^I thought the scenario you illustrated in the first stanza was a little odd, if not a tad-bit left-fieldish. However, after putting everything into the correct context I thought it worked pretty good for the moralistic/ethicial implication you were trying to imply. Either way, it made me nod my head in agreement; as well as ponder on the topic a bit. So to say the least -- I thought it was dope!



    Again:

    Killing two birds with one stone, and
    we'll call the birds people,
    while cigarettes are the stones cast.
    so how is your mother your hero
    if her idea of a helping hand -
    means to keep your breaths low.


    and so...

    you search for heroes, but a good deed
    now only means ten more bad ones.
    a parents response to a hero would be
    that we were all bad once.
    ^I liked how you attempted to exam the contradicting nature of all these so called "Do Gooders", it really brought some light to the optimistic outlook we cast so readily. Anyway, I'm not going to give you an entire thesis on telling you what you already know and just said, I mean it's pointless and really a waste of words. So, just know that I thought it was a dope piece; and I think you should keep up the good work.





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    Last edited by LedgenZ; March 12th, 2008 at 02:28 AM

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    Re: Heroes Don't Exist.

    thanks ledge. can always count on you for some good feed sonz.

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