Home Sweet Home

[Soul Slayer]

Home Sweet Home


1st verse Vincible
2nd verse Scientific
3rd verse Datboy Split



I want to go home..........
Where the atmosphere is warm
Lost in two differnt worlds
Will i ever call this home?


This is the place where dopamine doubles
the hustle & bustle of life seems more subtle
to whisper to your beloved..."I love you"
I guess it has an effect on the mind
forever at this hearth caught in this time
Its the nostalgia that arrests me
something about being a family man
became sexy, it really used to stress me
I gave up a dollop of dreams wanting to Emcee
here in this home I never felt so alive
exchanged mic checks for piggy back rides
yearning my long-awaited HOMECOMING

I want to go home..........
Where the atmosphere is warm
Lost in two differnt worlds
Will i ever call this home?



Life has never seemed so bleek before
Dark coners provide comfort coz life is sore
Everyday we're driven by a word called choice
The raucous thought in the mind is my so called voice!
Listened to the head en lost contact with my bloodline
Leaving Home proved an omen.Boundin me to the sidelines
Companionship could evoke a more blissful me
I incline to make this thought fruitful.... see?
Its time i drew the line. Refusing to be somber
Stench of sweaty sheets greet me from my slumber
I yell out with a great sigh, " thank God!!!"
"It was all a dream," Christ Im glad to be HOME

I want to go home..........
Where the atmosphere is warm
Lost in two differnt worlds
Will i ever call this home?


Lost on the road without pavement or lines
Running from my sorrow and my mind
Im losing it, can't see or breathe like i used to
As i walk along the road, it dirties my shoes
Singing out loud, listening myself echo
Thinking about the past..that i just can't let go
Walking straight..but it found to be in a circle
My heart skips beats...so running is like a hurdle
Moving slow, at a fast pace and time is gone
Looking at the place im in...one thing is never wrong
Ending up in the same place...no matter where i rome
I guess it just shows....that this is what i call Home

[Soul Slayer]

Ooh i almost forgot about the links. Silly me

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ce-363414.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...oo-364118.html

[Soul Slayer]

Upping feed . Leave links after feeding
and i'll hit em up.

[HwI]

Vincible:

This is the place where dopamine doubles
the hustle & bustle of life seems more subtle
to whisper to your beloved..."I love you"

Enjoyed this opening..

Its the nostalgia that arrests me
something about being a family man
became sexy

I can relate to this concept..very cool

Scientific:

Life has never seemed so bleek before
Dark coners provide comfort coz lifes'sore
Everyday we're driven by a word called choice
The raucous thought in my mind is my voice!

Wording could be tweaked a tad..but this was nice

Companionship could evoke a more blissful me

Indeed..

Stench of sweaty sheets greet me from my slumber

Nicely written..

Datboy Split:

Singing out loud, listening myself echo
Thinking about the past..that i just can't let go
Walking straight..but it found to be in a circle
My heart skips beats...so running is like a hurdle

Wordings a little iffy..but the concept is strong.

Looking at the place im in...one thing is never wrong
Ending up in the same place...no matter where i rome

Found this enjoyable..

Overall, I'd say this piece really had a simplistic elegance which made it a rather enjoyable read..Everything seemed effortless, yet the ideas portrayed in each verse were powerful..I'd say each verse was also flawed in the sense that the content was alittle choppy in certain areas, but as a whole, I think you guys did a solid job with this..

[Soul Slayer]

lol uppin............................

[Soul Slayer]

Still uppin feed

[P. Mortuus]

Can you do me a favour and take off the itallics man.

[Soul Slayer]

Uppin people come on......

[XM]

not a bad collab at all, the blue typed intro is very very....annoying to look at plus it draws the reader attention away from the verses IMO i kno it did that to me lol but overally this could've been better, the verses didn't really combined together but im guessing yall are speaking of your own inflictions towards what yall call home if so then of course they wouldn't blend but if not yall should've worked more on this, each of yall have some nicely worded lines, nothing was really spectacular in some cases as in vocabulary and emotion but all of yall controlled the imagry scene and i was feeling that altho i am a vocabulary man and love to see multi syllable rhyming wasn't too much of that in this piece but anyway props to the drop and Scientific your get'n better.

[Soul Slayer]

Thanks man and yeah this was based on 3 heads and
their view of what home is through experience etc.
I'll change the blue pz

[XM]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...us-365059.html

Oh yeah yall hit up my new OM first on in a long time

[Soul Slayer]

done

[Jayone]

This is the place where dopamine doubles
the hustle & bustle of life seems more subtle
to whisper to your beloved..."I love you"
I guess it has an effect on the mind
forever at this hearth caught in this time
Its the nostalgia that arrests me
something about being a family man
became sexy, it really used to stress me
I gave up a dollop of dreams wanting to Emcee
here in this home I never felt so alive
exchanged mic checks for piggy back rides
yearning my long-awaited HOMECOMING



first verse was dope made me want to continue to read....flow was good...content was dope...decent vocab.....good shit



Life has never seemed so bleek before
Dark coners provide comfort coz life is sore
Everyday we're driven by a word called choice
The raucous thought in the mind is my so called voice!
Listened to the head en lost contact with my bloodline
Leaving Home proved an omen.Boundin me to the sidelines
Companionship could evoke a more blissful me
I incline to make this thought fruitful.... see?
Its time i drew the line. Refusing to be somber
Stench of sweaty sheets greet me from my slumber
I yell out with a great sigh, " thank God!!!"
"It was all a dream," Christ Im glad to be HOME

second verse was smooth....well written complimented the first verse well....dope shit.....


Lost on the road without pavement or lines
Running from my sorrow and my mind
Im losing it, can't see or breathe like i used to
As i walk along the road, it dirties my shoes
Singing out loud, listening myself echo
Thinking about the past..that i just can't let go
Walking straight..but it found to be in a circle
My heart skips beats...so running is like a hurdle
Moving slow, at a fast pace and time is gone
Looking at the place im in...one thing is never wrong
Ending up in the same place...no matter where i rome
I guess it just shows....that this is what i call Home


third verse off the chain thought this really brought it all together and personally myy favorite verse of the piece....yall all came dope though....

8/10


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