"Quotes" from a brick wall

[Jon]

A brick wall once told me...

I need change, because gas prices are too high;
the fuel for our economy is too expensive -
we'll soon die. I heard a rumor from our president,
that the clouds will cry out for help; & maybe
they'll leave, letting the sun bully our residents...
I need change, because I can't afford my cousin
gifts for Christmas; the birth of a god - yet
he refuses to help a man in need? Deeds
won't be done unless moneys involved...
I need change, an epidemic of diseases spread
throughout the nation - no medication;
NOTE: SEEK SALVATION.
Wait, he's to busy trying to find the guy
some money for his relatives Christmas gifts.
I need change, Dr. Martin Luther King,
the king of equalness who died by his friendlyness.
Now men are being hanged, tortured - raped;
even worse, called a disgrace?
I need change, children seeking refuge
in foster homes; only to be beaten by their
only parental figure, or raped until they get bigger.
I need change, a whole genocide raves on in
countries belonging to foregners - we don't care.
I NEED CHANGE...

I'm painted on the minds of steriotypical people;
who'd rather blast their music than last with improvement.
Life's brutal so they'd rather ignore it - all the while
they take their time walking by me; instead of finding
a new life style that'll be worthwhile. Its THAT vital...
So, go back to your life at home - with garden gnomes,
water hoses; bloody noses, but please leave knowin' this:

I NEED CHANGE.

Now, go on with your life & have a nice day.

[Soule]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=6328902
Not Quite Enough - Bupolar And LedgenZ

I promise, you'll love the read man.


This was a reall good read from you dude, if it wasn't for LedgenZ you more then likely would of had that RI piece of the week. Your wording was really good here and made up some really creative lines here and there. Imagery held some fantastic visuals... and some very vivid descriptives. Emotion was pretty much dead on man, and I loved the concept originality dude. Nom'd.

[Jon]

thanks, i'll hit up your piece soon

[HighEngineChief]

This was pretty cool, I saw it in RI but never really read it. Your metaphores and personification were cool, I liked the repitition, you didn't over do it wich is good. The end is the best part, it felt like you were saving it and it paid off. One thing I would say is up the vocab a bit. Theres a cool site called freerice.com that gives starving children 20 grains of rice for every synonym you get correct, some cool SAT words. Check it out

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ou-366083.html
RTF mannnn!^^^^

[Jon]

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