Love Never Dies [SS Piece]

[Cody Nash]

Love Never Dies: Act I-III
By: Cry


Cast:
Love's Killer
Love's Mistress
Love's Victim







Act I -
Death is but the Gift of Love Unwrapped.




"Even my conscience's hate hugs to me...
and I leave him behind to watch my love from a tree."


Love's Killer:
What's inside of this picture proves method to madness,
as he lay with her I stand projected with crass hints -
in ravished yellow rays... I stand in a calm mellow blaze
screaming under the tree, she emits this bellowed craze
of yells those hate to hear; shouts that break the ear!
and he sits in a river that shows she don't fake the tears
I'm faceless here... I thought she'd come back if I did it
but in this affair, love cut my tounge and it had me witless
in a saddening scrimmage between that thing and this...
I ended him, choked by the hands it was happening with,
a cackling twist, my delacate hands had left marks as rough
and when I killed him, I'd never touched her heart as much.

Love's Mistress: How could you do this? I cared for you.

Love's Killer: If you cared, why'd you love us both?

Love's Mistress:
Got a reverberating feeling, hadn't learned to hate it as much -
as he loved me... it never had meaning, it'd only tasted as lust.
the fact was... he never really showed me that touch...
it was never "that love", no fulfillment to have enough.
he'd act tough, and for not leaving my husband I'd be bruised up
but his love didn't seem fake so you never knew who's what
truth was, for HIM you couldn't find a tear pouring off me
but when my husband died, I cried an entire river for his body.



Act II -
Love is Survival of the Fittest.


Love's Killer:
Cringing at the sight of his carcass as if ill, she'd knelt -
right down in the water, still she loved him; still she held
and staring at what I'd done, I see that nothing's helped
"My one regret in life is that I am not somebody else."

- Woody Allen



Act III -
Love's Always been a Battlefield.


Love's Victim:
Dead in her tears... my last words for her to hear -
were quite jumbled into bits and at first were drear.
but I purged her tears if only for that moment...
then she leaned and kissed me to not lack atonement
this masked opponent cried as well, left running fast
despite my bloody lips to hers, he knew what we had.


"Good night, good night! parting is such sweet sorrow,
That I shall say good night till it be morrow."


- and shakespeare himself couldn't have said it better.




[Love's Killer exits stage right while the sunset shines down...
never losing a touch of feeling, the man just cries out.]



Jealousy... lust... love... all have clever ties
but emotionally or physically, your love never dies.






peace.









I'll come up with links by tomorrow... if not then close it if you must. really bussy and stuff... can't read and be coherent with feedback it's too late. lol.

[Soul Slayer]

Nash i haven't been to Om in a while and i'm glad
to back so as to see some of these lovely reads
that you write here my dude. This is from SS and
i'm not surprised it packed such powerful emotion.
Your writing here was very graphic painting plenty
of vivid pictures in my head. The concepts were
well polished if i do say so myself even though
its not something that was new.

Thanks for keeping this place alive. i enjoyed
this read. RFT this when you come around.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ft-367510.html

[Soul Slayer]

Nash i haven't been to Om in a while and i'm glad
to back so as to see some of these lovely reads
that you write here my dude. This is from SS and
i'm not surprised it packed such powerful emotion.
Your writing here was very graphic painting plenty
of vivid pictures in my head. The concepts were
well polished if i do say so myself even though
its not something that was new.

Thanks for keeping this place alive. i enjoyed
this read. RFT this when you come around.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ft-367510.html

[Mariah]

links Ho

[freestylemaster]

This was an interesting peice. You showed a style of complex words and the imagery was fantastic. I liked the way you made it kind of into a little play and how each character had to do with the other. It must have taken some real attitude and time into this piece and the work payed out. Good job.
Get at me.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ky-367612.html

^^new peice hit me up

[Cody Nash]

fed on Ntalek's - Jaded ...and freestyle's - Open Sky thingy or whatever...

[Ntalek]

Hmm..this was a good read..in all aspects..except 1 and that would be Structure..not like the face value of the structure but ..the lil act 1 act 2 scene 1 things..kinda took a bit away from the read by slowing it down...though it didn't really effect the content..I just think you could've left those out..but now re-reading it..I see whay you put them there...anyway..this was a good read you had some dope emotion and flow behind it..though a bit choppy @ times..still a good drop...stay up..

And could you hit this with some REAL feed..thx..it would be appreciated.

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...html?p=6364409

[Cody Nash]

^try gettin' to that by the weekend. I'm a bussy fool.



but yeah, it was meant to be read like a play... I didn't make it as long as I'd have liked but you get what you read.

[freestylemaster]

new peice hit me up

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...st-367690.html

[A.T.]

probably the best set up of this topic that I have seen.
You have got some real skill in making these OM's complete.
Your flow was decent, a little choppy in places, but it wasnt
hard to catch. had a few multies in there, big plus on that.
other than that I dont have anything negitive to say, other than
a played topic, but you made up for it by your set up of it.
good read