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    Welcome to the Carnival

    Welcome to the Carnival
    The carnival acts…


    A charlatan I see visions with enmity
    so deceitful & translucent they vine
    towards me grasping my throat;
    till I utter their words of fear & loathing
    warping my sense; I sense failure & defeat
    so I hear the visions lie- I disagree
    but my voice is unheard;
    And the client it seems readily believes
    so eager he grasps invisible straws;
    much alike telling a deaf man words of the wise
    is telling this blind man his future is bright
    twisted & formed words warped in a way
    their worth fades as does my vision;
    leaving them penny a piece…
    & sold as uncompassionate
    words from mechanical writers;
    and if there is a meaning it’s by chance…
    or the ignorance of a happy man
    looking deep into shallow waters.

    An odd skip in his step, a foolish smile…
    graces his face a picture of peace & content
    he moves ahead to the next tent, the next act


    Showered in happiness he tries not to laugh
    serenading the crowd joy & slapping his sticks
    to create a buzz of slapstick comedy…
    he launches his companion;
    And his companion soars, fly’s like a bird
    but crashes into the safety net like a fly;
    crushed…the crowd loves him from afar;
    but up-close he seems alone
    in a pantomime of distrust & destruction
    with the odd disruption of claps;
    clapped at for risking his life, is he not a hero?
    Inching nearer to death with every leap…
    yet they see no hero…Just a gymnast
    & a clown…. Squirting tears from flowers…

    The crowd moves ignorant to the plight
    no profit means no meals & no meals
    mean the clown is left behind…
    No one cares for a clown…
    when they have the dancers
    and so move the men
    in the tent of taboo….


    She seems unperturbed, glowing & radiant
    her beauty unscathed- then why is it she
    seems so adamant at stripping me
    as well as she strips herself…
    only difference is she sells her soul
    stripping her self-respect…
    And I sell my soul stripping away
    in debt; her eyes are shrouded
    guarding the window to the soul;
    the last shard of decency she has
    is in denial; it can’t fathom
    her situation; where she is taken
    alone & taken with many;
    A dancer slash meat; a product
    of society….gratifying the men
    satisfying their curiosity…she moves.

    And so ends their day...


    A family event folks,
    it’s the era of depression
    so come along & laugh
    learn the future & share
    your lonely nights….
    The Carnival is in town!


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    Re: Welcome to the Carnival

    The crowd moves ignorant to the plight
    no profit means no meals & no meals
    mean the clown is left behind…
    No one cares for a clown…
    when they have the dancers
    and so move the men
    in the tent of taboo….
    Either i'm crazy or i'm just crazy lol cuz i really digged this part.
    Great use of vocab and the imagery was nice. I'ma actually look for more of your drops right now lmao cuz i really enjoyed this piece.

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    Re: Welcome to the Carnival

    Quote Originally Posted by Baron P. Mortuus View Post
    That was a very good part, I loved this peice from you Baron.
    It's good to see your writing once again...for it has always
    brought such good imagry along with it...
    As what the kid above me...diddn't really pay attention to his name honestly haha, you had some decent vocabulary...
    Good drop Baron.

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