Monotopia of Statured Janovia

[Spoken]

Monotopia of Statured Janovia
-Lustration between time

“The Most Difficult Phase of Life,
Is not When No one Understands you;
It is when You Don’t understand…
…Yourself”

Paleontology-
Just couldn’t describe my inner feeling.
It was as if…
…The sun was reflecting all insight.
Maybe for the better;
Just maybe even for the worse,
Seems to natural to judge but the truth…
…seems to remain quiet.
-Why?

Belittle my ambitions,
For today is a new day- I guess.
I wonder if he remembers me;
For who I was and not for what we did.
Those eyes I shall never forget,
As they caressed and chiseled; my physique…
…to fine standards, that outlined HIS heart.
I was his for the moment,
I never stepped back; I consoled it…
…as he did in return,
but if only we would have stayed,
just a little longer.
-to get to know me
I seem Lost in a way,
Maybe I’m just dwelling on a new acquaintance,
Or company whatever you feel like calling it.
It’s been so long since I had someone…
…grace with me with such interest,
Yet not being able to thank him enough.
-for a smile

“The Most Difficult Phase of Life,
Is not When No one Understands you;
It is when You Don’t understand…
…Yourself”

My thoughts seems a bit- sporadic?
I guess I’m just jumping the gun towards…
…happiness since its something new
-to me
So for time’s sake,
I’ll just bake and let the sun...
…melt away every stench of waste,
That was wasted on hoping…
…and expect nothing.
-He is worth while I hope I am too…
It is said that an eclipse is to come every six years.
So I shall let the waiting commence
-5 years and 364 days en-counting

The only reason I sit here,
Staring at the beautiful reflection;
Of the sun…
…is cause the way it warms me;
Is the way you took my breathe away.

[Spoken]

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[Spoken Deity]

first, thank you SO much for the sentence structure... I like it when I can just read with out the hip hop feel...
The things that came out in this poem are brilliant. The logic of the heart was so beautifully conveyed. You really open up the character (yourself?) and give them a window to look into there (your?) soul.
The line below...
“The Most Difficult Phase of Life,
Is not When No one Understands you;
It is when You Don’t understand…
…Yourself” .... is brilliant. Reusing that as a transition was amazing and keeps the reader on track. I'm really into the repeating point motif.
This poem is very moving and should be put in the hall of fame for this month. I love it.
Hit my link if you could... And I'm tossing you in for the nominations for the hall of fame.

[Spoken]

thanks appreciate it!

[Spoken]

yup yup


bump!

[Jawn Raw]

i enjoyed this piece, seemed like a very well written story with nice creativity as well. I can see this being said as a spoken word piece almost, i really enjoyed it. the imagery was sparkley n shit. this piece wasnt to long or too short, it was the perfect size and it didn't take away from the pace of the story. i really liked this man. nice

[Spoken Deity]

ders, you mind hittin my sig?

[Spoken]

word thanks and i will do spoken

[Spoken]

bump guys lets get it poppin.