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Thread: When I said forever, i meant forever..

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    When I said forever, i meant forever..

    "Baby, your my angel forever, and always.."




    Things are so different, as emotions and feelings are changing
    Promises are being broken, and all the pain, is suddenly gaining


    Broken heart still remaining, i dropped yours, and mine as well
    Because without you, here by my side, i've been through hell


    First love, feels like it shall be the last? Alas i move on, ahead
    because i was used to you here..
    Yet, we had to say goodbye, and yet, your tatoo'd in my head


    You said us staying together was impossible, but thats nothing to me miss
    But we fell so fast, and hard, was something i would have to agree with


    Lifes been so hard lately..I gave you a necklace, to be never returned
    a gift from the heart, and then shattered, stomped on and burned



    I'm never letting go of those vivid memories, which holds my grace
    Because only an angel, could have such a beautiful face


    Even though we're apart till' this day, me move on, is a never
    Because when i said i'm yours, forever, i meant forever..



    He see's her for the first time in a long time, he's speachless, shes moved on, and hes stuck still in love.


    It was amazing, of how you could say such things, and turn your back
    ..Because mistakes happen all the time, and i wish i could take mine back


    So yet, all the pain was too much to bare, i moved on, to a better life
    To show you that i'm not just a mistake, that i can do some things right


    Even though, i've moved on to someone else, memories lost? Never.
    Because when i said your my angel, i meant that forever.









    eh, a short piece, and a very rusty rusty piece..

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    Re: When I said forever, i meant forever..

    this was a dope piece and emotional, I liked it..
    and the wording was good
    the vocab could've been better but it best fits a piece like this
    ..short and got the point across
    I been in the position before and it sucks
    to actually watch another man with a girl you still love
    so yeah this was ok
    thanks for the read and keep writing..

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    Re: When I said forever, i meant forever..

    thanks,
    leave links and i'll hit them up.

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    YokeYaSlowPokeLocalYokel Mr. Wells's Avatar
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    Re: When I said forever, i meant forever..

    Nice drop, gotta agree with Open Mic Surgery though, vocab could've been better.
    Played topic, but it was well worded so it sounded nice.

    Peep this:
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...er-374992.html
    or this
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...sk-374957.html

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    Re: When I said forever, i meant forever..

    Link Hit.

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    Re: When I said forever, i meant forever..

    Uppin.

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    Re: When I said forever, i meant forever..

    Bump.

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    Re: When I said forever, i meant forever..

    Wow this was dope man, the rhyme scheme fit the piece perfectly..the content of each bar was solid. This was an emotional piece, I got the impression you have actually gone through this juding by the vibe I got, either that or you deserve more credit than your getting, cuz if you can put yourself in someones shoes like that an describe it so well without actually goin through it..thats talented, it was solid none the less. I didn't have a problem with the vocab, it was on point..nothing to complicated to throw off the piece, good drop man..hit my om up, Falling Through..its not far below this one just look a few om's down from this
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