The Gods Screamed

[P. Mortuus]

They said God screamed at us
For what other reason
Are we alone? Cold upon groves
Of the all Saints, so ignorant
The grooves of the statues
support vanity instead of passion;
cold hearted, my blood iced
the rain blanketing
what was once nice;
long ago Father said
“Don’t cry, keep the smile;
For what’s life without
Laughter”;
Why so serious?
Etched smile
Permanent; father would be proud…

Crazy or just wearing a mask
I waltzed down lanes, showered
by torrential rain; aghast
I couldn't breathe
as every breath meant
I was drowning above ground;
my knees were weak
But I walked on
forever...in an undless journey
of self realisation.

Heavens can't accept me;
Their stairway clouded by pollution;
So I sit close to old graves
Of old friends & in old ways
I leave flowers; dead just like them;
I walk solo…no shadow
No sun, maybe I’m just soulless
Alone…neither peers nor equals
So I walk 1 step at a time…

[P. Mortuus]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...et-374099.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...rt-375037.html

[Spoken Deity]

This wasnt bad at all...
Alot of the imagery was good. You had a solid concept with alot of intelligence. I enjoyed the read alot. It was short, but still complex enough to make it fun and enjoyable.
dope lines these:

So I sit close to old graves
Of old friends & in old ways
I leave flowers; dead just like them;
I walk solo…no shadow
No sun, maybe I’m just soulless
Alone…neither peers nor equals
So I walk 1 step at a time…

[Soule]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...er-375366.html



This was a pretty good piece, like Spoken said there was a lot of good visuals here. The concept, is similiar to most religious pieces you've done before [wow there is a lot of those] but it still came out well. Basically, that's all I can think of. Long day, I'll comeback tomorrow and fill in more if you want. Keep writing.

[Jamhuri]

Maybe people smile to try warm the coldness inside than hide it. I like the concept man. Plus the wording. My type.

[Cody Nash]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ft-375399.html
this is for you... please and thank ya...





lol, this piece was pretty cool... because of that beginning stanza I'm either under the impression you're writing about the Joker or you were using the Joker as a metaphor... either way it was a pretty cool read. typical crazy person type read, but with (I think) a lot more depth than normal pieces like this... it was more feeling and emotion than anything, which by the way - seems to be your strong point! so good read bro.. really liked it and there's nothing bad at all I can pinpoint in here... thanks for the read.


- Nashty