5 Finger Revolution

[LedgenZ]

these hands
these empty hands you tie up.

without
life/
line
or
dream.

will wait for
ropes to decide
they are tired
of holding on.

and then

these hands
these empty hands
will buy knives
bullets
and guns
full of freedom.

[Spoken Deity]

*reads 4-5 times*
Short, but complete... Thats hard to write in my opinion. The theme was very smart, lots of weight to it. I assume the '/' after life is an accident...if not, i'd replace with it a comma or take it out all together.
The statement could be used and put to a hundred different things.

Short drop, short feed I guess. Interesting drop Ledge...Different from what i'm used to reading from you.
hit I've Got Nothing Left in my sig eh?

[Messiah.]

I honestly have to say that i fucking loved it man. Great and hard piece to write because its hard to close a piece with so few lines. Overall i thought the mood did it for me and the final stanza finished it off great with the freedom at the end. Overall i cant feed alot cause there wasnt alot but nice job. Feed this please...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ft-376220.html

[Lestat]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ow-376247.html



Like Spoken said, really short but deffinently complete. I actually loved this man, real oldschool poetry right here bro. Nice wording and it just felt really effective for the length of it. Keep it up.