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    Poison Speech.

    Poison Speech.
    By:Spekz.

    Words walk off my tongue
    Indulging in conversation,
    An unseen phenomenon
    As though they swarm in packs
    Attacking a listening ear…
    Use at your own risk,
    Or bear the consequences…

    Words;
    Loving & Hateful
    Sour & Kind
    Right & Wrong
    Truth & Lies…
    ...User beware.


    Today I spoke,
    How careless I was…


    Syllables slit my throat,
    Sliding on air;
    Before they’re even spoke.
    Wide eyes revoke acceptance
    A lesson to a pointed finger,
    As it twists – me!?
    Thoughts lament cautiously,
    Dancing on a curled tounge;
    How rare they escape.
    However,
    In a moments loss of focus
    Control is debt to a roaming threat
    Hoping to confess on open ears,
    Your outspoken mind relishes.

    Tempers flail – words transform
    From a simple means of language,
    To a daunting army, resembling
    Penetrating curses of internal damage.
    Rest assure – physically you remain intact.
    But in fact your emotions tender and raw
    Bleed as though poured slowly
    Through lifeless lips.
    Now words spark gasps – choking;
    Tears swell, pain finds a home -
    A resting noose, hangs ahead.
    Battling sentences trump resistance
    Revolting against stammering lies,
    A victor is crowned – by a smile.
    Meshed in defeat cries tremble
    Words lost in the heat of the moment
    As you’re torn to pieces,
    From the inside out.
    Forced to be eaten alive
    By the very thoughts,
    That woke a dormant beast – a simple combination
    Of the honest to god truth…
    …a simple lapse in considerate judment.

    Words – a powerful existence.
    A simple doze,
    May just poison the air you breathe.


    Last edited by Spekz.; November 21st, 2008 at 02:30 AM
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    Re: Poison Speech.

    First off I'd like to say..congrats on writing a very very dope drop..this shit was sick from beginning to end...the way you conveyed your imagery to the reader was just raw..and the entire concept of this piece and how you delivered it is what made it that way...I mean you stayed in the box..but your thoughts were way outside of it..if i may say so...the second stanza italicized was what really began to bring that message across..you had a ton of quotable lines in this piece...the thoughts dancing on a curled tongue was brillantly displayed imagery...and the way that you worded it was dope...I've seen alot of great pieces from you but it's clear to see that you are truely a talented writer...not to mention that clicking the thread I thought this would be something entirely different...but you placed every word carefully and really made this and exciting and entertaining read...props my dude I really really like this piece..NOM'D...

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    Re: Poison Speech.

    upity do dah.
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    Re: Poison Speech.

    This was a very nice drop and of course it will be slept on since its the weekend and what not. I really like the content and your vocabulary. Everything seemed to flow smoothly. I really liked the fourth stanza you would say. It was full of everything and it just was amazing! I loved the last couple of lines! Nice way to close it

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    Re: Poison Speech.

    This was very deep and polished imo...It was like you took that saying of..."life and death are in the tongue"....but you changed it around and showed the emphasis on words....It was real creative to me how you went about this.



    Words;
    Loving & Hateful
    Sour & Kind
    Right & Wrong
    Truth & Lies…
    ...User beware.

    Today I spoke,
    How careless I was…


    I just thought these lines were cool....very unique way you filled out a stanza. Very poetic and well-thought out.



    A victor is crowned – by a smile.
    Meshed in defeat cries tremble
    Words lost in the heat of the moment
    As you’re torn to pieces,
    From the inside out.
    Forced to be eaten alive
    By the very thoughts,
    That woke a dormant beast – a simple combination
    Of the honest to god truth…
    …a simple lapse in considerate judgement.


    this had a ton of quotables throughout....but I liked these lines alot cause how they seemed to kinda sum up all of what you said....liked this poetic synopsis.

    Great piece Spekz....one of the first pieces of yours I read and really dug and got a feel for your writing style and its idiosyncracies.

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    Re: Poison Speech.

    ^^appreciate sin.

    Good feed.

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