^wtf, take that shit else were.
^wtf, take that shit else were.
^^up
sawp man....I liked this piece from you.....More than just a battler I see....I thought this was a nice consistent piece......I like the title and the chorus helps out a bit too..Flow was a little choppy at times, but nothing huge....Imagery was on point and the emotion stayed kinda neutral (like you were narrating the story) Which I kinda found interesting....Overall man I thought this was quite good.....Like bilayer said....a little re-wording might of helped the flow....but...it was a good read....thanx man....peace....Keep em coming... Check out "The Shelter" if you get a chance in OM.....
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thx upp
It's sounds pretty good, got a good rythm i think.
Nice one.
dood i just read this again and realized how amazing it is. nice shit man.
i liked had decent multis and some nice wordplay also i liked the structure but i think you should come more original with some of your material.
^I don't see how this wasn't original...I thought the concept was nice, imagery was good, it was more about showcasing a message rather than lyrical ability, in which case you did effectively.
hit up my joint if you get a chance:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...ne-387777.html
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^rtf now, thx for all the feed guys.
(Kids go to school, to take xanex an roxys,
Before the panic, the kids graduated to oxys.)
that seems to be happening everywhere! its the same where im from. that heroin ish is an EPIDEMIC and its creeping its way to the younger generations faster and faster all the time. i watched a 13 yr. old kid progress from POPPIN PERKS(tec) to SNIFFIN 20s-40s-80s; and just last month i found out he was SMASHIN them... kids runnin a marathon to his grave by the looks of the tracks on his arms. enyway its just a shame.
FAV. bars though, ones about drivers and survivers... thats real.
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