don't push your luck

[ajh316]

this is the first time i've tried to use multis tell me what you think(theirs only a couple though) also i'm stuck i don't know what i can do to expand on this.

you offer us out
you think you'll have the last shout
but let me tell you something
just stay asleep don't wake, we'll show evrey1 you're a fake
all your bones will break, see how many punches in a second u can take
no1 will think you hard
you will just be known as a retard
You won't even turn up
you will see us then think Fuck
For u this will be a no show
we'll beat you down you know

i'll knock you clean out
hear u scream, hear u shout
ya no your fait will seal your screams will echo
you're bigger than me but i'll make u feel as small as a geko
no dont push your luck
dont show or i'll fuck you up
i'll smash u up and leave u crying in a bin
i aint lying this is 1 fight u wish you'd never been in
so dont push your luck or i'll fuck you right up
i'll make u eat your food with a straw and a cup

[Intellexual]

Try internal rhymes, first. That will allow you to get comfortable with the mechanics, in a much more forgiving exercise. An internal rhyme that's not filler (stays on topic and is pleasing to the senses) can really bring out a line and you'll be more apt to develop the instincts necessary to start pouring out unforced multis.

[country]

do topicals , topicals is the best ay to grow lyrically


and also peep what both dudes above esaid


look at other shit here


wel some of the stuff here

cuz some is just fuckn garbage

[ajh316]

topicals?

[Emajanashun]

i say stay away from the battle type raps ur too young to be acting like it...you can deff tell your young the rhymes were weak, you should read others like someone previously said and try to learn from them... i wouldnt say trying topicals is a bad idea ... go for it, they will help you i think