No Way Out

[Kapital J]

Half of me says "dont"
The other half says "do it"
Got my finga on da trigga
So tempted to pull it
FUCK THIS!!!
I cant take it anymore
What am I here for
Its not like I have anything to live for
My father walked out the door
Before I was born
My mother's not here no more
Im mentally unstable
From all the hatred that I store
So Lord please
I accept defeat
Bring death to me
So Im finally with my mother
May we both rest in peace


R.I.P MOM

[tjacks7]

Don't know how to say this cause it was def. a real piece.. Sorry to hear about your moms man.

But, the first few lines I was thinking "does he really believe this" "is this true or just somethin to write about"? (Obviously, it looks like it's true by the RIP Mom at the bottom). I thought a few spots could have been smoother like rhyming "for" with "for." I've only heard the same word rhymed together once so far that made me say dag that was nice (Chevy Ridin' High - "I ain't playin fool, this ain't xbox.. but I can take you to the morgue and you can pick out the best box" or something to that effect)

If it were me I'd have pieced it like this:

My mind says "dont" be smart
I'm blind, my heart says "do it"
Finga on da trigga such bullshit
So tempted to pull it
FUCK THIS!!! I yell
What the hell am I here for
I cant take it anymore
Nothin' to live for, can't ignore
My father walkin out the door
Before I was born, I mourn
The loss of my mother, enable
Me God, Im mentally unstable
From all the hatred I've stored
So Lord please, I accept defeat
It's time we meet
Bring death to me, you see
At least then I'm with my mother
May we both rest in peace

Or somethin like that I dunno

[Esc0BosS]

^^ lol yours is more lyrical, but the other one flows better...

anyway, if this took you more than 2min, its str8 whack... decent emotion, but thats about all you bringin to the table

no hate, but take it how u want #1