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Barbarism
..Compa..
Check ins due Wednesday at the latest..
Verses due Friday at the latest (however, I say fuck Friday, lol)....
Last edited by Barcotic; March 15th, 2009 at 08:36 PM
10....
word lol
Check! g/luck man
homeless cunt, should I kick what ya wear or send Socks to give
'cuz I'll chew MIKE and ike's then spit you back at the.. sweet box you live!
I MTV with ya dad's spouse, she loved to swallow with her made mouth..
..that's how I Pop in this shit, n' ya mom's not only BARfed but you came out
bar girl's a slut,
n' relationships are shakey at time's prick, rest your head..
'cuz if YOU feel a landside near by.. that's me rocking her bed
NME,Barcotic,Skills, n' now Barbarism, fuck outta here with those names
mayne you always say that's "noob-ish" well what your doing is most LAME
bar won't win, n' retard said he was gonna make FL mag, but where, is him!?
damn liar KICKING IT in the LLL so much.. he came back with his legs missing
..Keyed this in like 10 minutes, right after I set this battle up, lol..
I spar fire, I'm a hard rider wrappin you in barbed wire,
my axle take your head off
..then I'll attatch it to my car tire..
I'll also kill your girl and dispose of both bodies the G way,
put yours in a bag, Packers in too
..then drop you in Green Bay..
Or step in my jungle but try to retreat before I fire the heat,
..cuz the bangel leave your body lifeless for the tigers to eat..
So why battle newbs? you should make it less permanent,
with so many rooks on your win list
..it could host a chess tournament..
LOL, I feel bad now, he can't win and he knows this,
..I just cut the C so much I'm competition for Moses..
compa - After reading your verse before hitting the reply button, I figured i'd try my best to give you positive feed back, seeing as you were dedicated enough to make it this far in the rankings. So bare with the feed back..
Vs.
Compa: to be blunt, your verse was amateur. I hope I gave enough applicable feed back to allow you to elevate a bit. You had too many forced concepts that weren't hard hitting. IF you can use my criticism for the better, than cool. But from what I've been told, you've been battling toooo many noobs. That will NEVER help you elevate. battle the tough opponents, take your losses and learn from it. A record attached to your post bit means absolutely nothing in the eyes of those that know better.. g/l
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NME,Barcotic,Skills, n' now Barbarism, fuck outta here with those names
mayne you always say that's "noob-ish" well what your doing is most LAME
your best use of wording and Wordplay, and punch in this battle.
Bar: I'm not going to give you any real feed back.. this isn't the LLL, so it's not like this verse is worth criticizing.. but seriously.. you give enough sports lines to fill a foot ball field.. OH SNAP
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Over all// Again, not what a champ match should ever look like. But this is the FL.. who cares.I spar fire, I'm a hard rider wrappin you in barbed wire,
my axle take your head off
..then I'll attatch it to my car tire..
v/ bar, long shottt
$usernamejoshs
$9.99 for an unbiased vote
$14.99 full breakdown vote
loving the feed josh propz, this will help me alot
Nice broken down vote, that's what i like to see....
*UNsticks this thread cuz for some reason I think it'll get more votes* lol....
^^^^^^^*was right*
homeless cunt, should I kick what ya wear or send Socks to give
'cuz I'll chew MIKE and ike's then spit you back at the.. sweet box you live!
WP was worded wrong u imply he live somewhere sweet...
I MTV with ya dad's spouse, she loved to swallow with her made mouth..
..that's how I Pop in this shit, n' ya mom's not only BARfed but you came out
not really hard hittin
bar girl's a slut,
n' relationships are shakey at time's prick, rest your head..
'cuz if YOU feel a landside near by.. that's me rocking her bed
not really feelin the concept but the punchies ok
NME,Barcotic,Skills, n' now Barbarism, fuck outta here with those names
mayne you always say that's "noob-ish" well what your doing is most LAME
nicest one yet
bar won't win, n' retard said he was gonna make FL mag, but where, is him!?
damn liar KICKING IT in the LLL so much.. he came back with his legs missing
this wasnt that hard hitting........
overall......id would say work on incorperating better wordplay into ur punches
Vrs.
I spar fire, I'm a hard rider wrappin you in barbed wire,
my axle take your head off
..then I'll attatch it to my car tire..
nice..but axe'll is kiinda played
I'll also kill your girl and dispose of both bodies the G way,
put yours in a bag, Packers in too
..then drop you in Green Bay..
wasnt really feelin this...good concept though
Or step in my jungle but try to retreat before I fire the heat,
..cuz the bangel leave your body lifeless for the tigers to eat..
nice WP
So why battle newbs? you should make it less permanent,
with so many rooks on your win list
..it could host a chess tournament..
lawlz........
LOL, I feel bad now, he can't win and he knows this,
..I just cut the C so much I'm competition for Moses..
Ouchies.........
Overall Nice Verse.........
Vote Bar.........Better Verse
- you bitches cant see me like air, but fear me, Because you Feel Me there-
-I Like a Map My Legends Defined By my Keyz
-I'm a Carnivore Rapper, I love Beef!
-Notez-
LOL, I feel bad now, he can't win and he knows this,
..I just cut the C so much I'm competition for Moses..
v.s
Nothing
if you have eyes you'd see compa came whack as fuck...im not breaking down shit...
LethalXpressionZ
Xpressing Lethalness
homeless cunt, should I kick what ya wear or send Socks to give
'cuz I'll chew MIKE and ike's then spit you back at the.. sweet box you live!
wasn't feeling it
I MTV with ya dad's spouse, she loved to swallow with her made mouth..
..that's how I Pop in this shit, n' ya mom's not only BARfed but you came out
meh
bar girl's a slut,
n' relationships are shakey at time's prick, rest your head..
'cuz if YOU feel a landside near by.. that's me rocking her bed
meh
NME,Barcotic,Skills, n' now Barbarism, fuck outta here with those names
mayne you always say that's "noob-ish" well what your doing is most LAME
good
bar won't win, n' retard said he was gonna make FL mag, but where, is him!?
damn liar KICKING IT in the LLL so much.. he came back with his legs missing
ok attempt
Vs
I spar fire, I'm a hard rider wrappin you in barbed wire,
my axle take your head off
..then I'll attatch it to my car tire..
ok
I'll also kill your girl and dispose of both bodies the G way,
put yours in a bag, Packers in too
..then drop you in Green Bay..
meh
Or step in my jungle but try to retreat before I fire the heat,
..cuz the bangel leave your body lifeless for the tigers to eat..
not bad
So why battle newbs? you should make it less permanent,
with so many rooks on your win list
..it could host a chess tournament..
lol nice
LOL, I feel bad now, he can't win and he knows this,
..I just cut the C so much I'm competition for Moses..
ok closer
V/Bar
Both RTF
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...vs-392633.html
propz on voting everyone, and thanks for the chance bar
hey could u guys RTF.........didnt mean that rudely : )
- you bitches cant see me like air, but fear me, Because you Feel Me there-
-I Like a Map My Legends Defined By my Keyz
-I'm a Carnivore Rapper, I love Beef!
-Notez-