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    Unhappy 2 verses to "This Is My Story" w/Hook

    Despite all of the pain and anger churnin inside
    I never really was the type of person to cry
    Just like hidin toys under my bed
    Back when I was a child
    When feelings didn't fit
    They would get hid behind a smile
    Sometimes I feel i'm swimmin in an ocean
    Up to my head in so many different emotions
    If visitin counselors was like bein washed ashore
    Then why is it I dont cry S.O.S. anymore?
    I truly felt that they couldn't help
    No matter how many mental health books
    That they pulled off the shelf
    So like a little turtle chillin inside of its shell
    I learned to close my mouth
    And always kept to myself
    But inside I knew I needed to do somethin
    I needed to take a break
    I couldn't keep running
    Then I remember way back when
    To that oneday
    This kid said "Spit somethin."
    So I spit
    Then I knew this was it

    This music
    This rap
    This pen and this pad
    Have gotten me so far in life

    And when life looks bad
    With the tools that I have
    Throw on a track
    And I start to write

    This music
    This rap
    This pen and this pad
    Have gotten me so far in life

    And when life looks bad
    With the tools that I have
    I throw on a track
    And continue write


    Like I said music and rap
    Have gotten me far in life
    When times are hard
    They make everything alright
    Not to mention my bestfriend
    If I lost her
    I wouldn't have anything left
    And I'd like to say thank you
    To all my friends that support me
    Amber and her family
    Especially Cory
    Im not conceited but I believe it
    When you say that you adore me
    Givin me every reason
    To keep continuing my story
    And my older brother Kam
    My right-hand man
    Wherever I stood
    Right beside me he'd stand
    He honestly taught me
    To not really give a damn
    Tellin me
    "Always look forward"
    And "Never say you can't'
    And Mom
    I appreciate the shot at life you've given me
    Believe it or not
    But a piece of you still lives in me
    And if that piece died
    There would be nothin left of me
    And thats why everyday
    I pray that you rest in peace

    This music
    This rap
    This pen and this pad
    Have gotten me so far in life

    And when life looks bad
    With the tools that I have
    Throw on a track
    And I start to write

    This music
    This rap
    This pen and this pad
    Have gotten me so far in life

    And when life looks bad
    With the tools that I have
    I Throw on a track
    And continue to write
    Last edited by Kapital J; March 17th, 2009 at 10:39 AM Reason: added a verse
    You just wanna be super but your as simple as it gets
    Some get the pooper scooper cuz I just shit on this kid!!

    Kapital J aka "Imperial Trigga"
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    You just wanna be super but your as simple as it gets
    Some get the pooper scooper cuz I just shit on this kid!!

    Kapital J aka "Imperial Trigga"
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    Re: This Is My Story w/Hook(Somethin I wrote in cl

    Anyone wanna hop on dis shit just hit me up......JUST STAY ON TOPIC
    You just wanna be super but your as simple as it gets
    Some get the pooper scooper cuz I just shit on this kid!!

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    Re: This Is My Story w/Hook(Somethin I wrote in cl

    has some good flow but really basic rhymes and you need some more multis and internals and to be honest this was an original version but the topics bin posted on many times so make it different from the rest and keep me intrested the flow was good tho and i liked the hook but try working on figureative language and more internals and multis other than that your cool
    btw if you want me to hit this up i will

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    Re: This Is My Story w/Hook(Somethin I wrote in cl

    im actually doin this for the talent show on my birthday im really nervous
    You just wanna be super but your as simple as it gets
    Some get the pooper scooper cuz I just shit on this kid!!

    Kapital J aka "Imperial Trigga"
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    Re: This Is My Story w/Hook(Somethin I wrote in cl

    lol relax just chill it's all good you just need to know that no matter what happens you have the skills to write this and you can be sure that i'm good with my words on this shit

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    awesome
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