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    Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    yo,

    .
    .

    The child-like innocence we're desperate to pass -
    then regret, years later that it ended so fast.
    like when Hades led Hercules to death in a flash,
    flames erupting in their path until Pegasus crashed.
    broken dreams sit, mended in a sensitive cast,
    leads a man tied down for life to question his past;
    but answers bring resentfulness, pressing him back,
    that's why mid-life crises are repetitive fads ..
    protected from lamps, always stay in the dark,
    cuz it might soften the spear tips that i'm taking to heart,
    hatred imparts itself when all awakening starts,
    thats the way the cookie crumbles when you break it apart.
    sacred as crosses in the halls of a chapel,
    are all those lost thoughts once your carcass unravels ..
    now empty as bronze armor lining walls in a castle,
    dead space, soldier's souls are still marching to battle.
    in love with the knowledge that incompetence cancels,
    no illumination brings a warmth as calm as its' shadows.
    bad news often will travel at light particle's speed,
    so there's a firewall built for any audible feed,
    their target is me; media outlet connectors
    every sense i possess reveals a thousand receptors,
    loud & uncensored, razor-sharp fangs of reality bites,
    family fights over salaries for half of the price,
    i can't handle the light! or the truth it accompanies,
    skipped my last court date deciding who gets the custody.
    starved for affection, the solution is gluttony -
    bills piling up, cash past due for the subsidy..
    bedroom mirror reflects, i catch a view of it suddenly:
    avoiding eye contact with the dude that's in front of me.

    so don't turn on the light .. it's too much fun in the dark,
    cause we can't know we're in hell if we know nothing at all..




    - Black
    I'm here to break my own ball and chain..

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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...40/index2.html
    http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...171/index.html

    btw this was for a league on another site.. and the topic was “Who turned on the lights?”

    thats all
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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    Yo B, you got mad skills bruh. Reminiscent of Wu-tang days, great use of vocabs. Keep it up!!
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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    really dope drop. the emotion showed clearly and the use of the vocabulary/word choice and wordplay emphasized that emotion even more. rhyme schemes and flow were perfect throughout with no exception except for the last two lines in which the rhyme scheme was a bit of a stretch. the metaphors in it were amazing and really showed what you were trying to say favorite lines were:

    protected from lamps, always stay in the dark,
    cuz it might soften the spear tips that i'm taking to heart,
    -the wordplay here was really dope. it's clever and deep without taking away meaning.

    now empty as bronze armor lining walls in a castle,
    dead space, soldier's souls are still marching to battle.
    -great simile in the first line and great metaphor in the second line. both portrayed a separate feeling, but both feelings came out clear.

    starved for affection, the solution is gluttony -
    -the oxymoron in this line is genius. very original concept and portrayal of emotion.

    so don't turn on the light .. it's too much fun in the dark,
    cause we can't know we're in hell if we know nothing at all..
    -like i said, not a great rhyme scheme, but these two lines really stood out to me in terms of meaning. there's a lot of depth in them and they sound almost philosophical, without taking the hip-hop feel out of them.

    great drop here, again. i guess i should give some kind of constructive criticism, so i'd say you could make this verse better if the lines were more coherent to each other. the concepts seemed slightly scattered, but imo it didn't hurt the piece.

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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    like when Hades led Hercules to death in a flash,
    flames erupting in their path until Pegasus crashed.
    -I love the nerdy mythological ref in there

    sacred as crosses in the halls of a chapel,
    are all those lost thoughts once your carcass unravels ..
    now empty as bronze armor lining walls in a castle,
    dead space, soldier's souls are still marching to battle.
    -I also like these two bars and how you used the similes.. following them up on the same thought

    bad news often will travel at light particle's speed,
    -more nerd coming out lmao

    loud & uncensored, razor-sharp fangs of reality bites,
    family fights over salaries for half of the price,
    i can't handle the light! or the truth it accompanies,
    skipped my last court date deciding who gets the custody.
    starved for affection, the solution is gluttony -
    bills piling up, cash past due for the subsidy..
    bedroom mirror reflects, i catch a view of it suddenly:
    avoiding eye contact with the dude that's in front of me.
    -ok.. I liked this section alot.. you started gettin personal.. and relatable with me here.. meaning I feel like you do.. haha.. more or less.. it's always good to put a little of you in your verse.. I like how you ended like this bro..

    the closer about ignorance is bliss was fire to

    I really liked this one.. glad your doing your thing.. I always enjoy your works

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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    thx iggy..
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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    and fuck the resta yall
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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    I already dropped a critique on this at that other place...

    Just wanted to take a moment to say that I'm in love with your writing....

    and completely jealous all at the same time.

    what an interesting dichotomy you are Mr. Black D.



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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    I think I owe a handful of feeds already...

    ..I'll add to this to the list.

    (will get at this later).
    Impart wisdom
    In part wishing
    The wit-starved listen
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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    why thank you Ms. fresh D .. i'm quite an avid fan of yours as well .. i just keep my personal opinions to myself too often to let you know

    and aight toolio .. no rush
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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    oh yeah - this is why i stopped posting OMs here..

    got it
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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    *echo*
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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    why stop posting om's here. dont do that black lol
    first off this shit was ridiculous man. you know it. your probably not getting much feed because well, its hard for me to convey an opinion about your work, its pretty self explanatory. flow was top shelf, and the imagery you bring to the table is always crazy shit, the last bar was just a nice caption to the entire piece. it had a little of everything I could ask for in a rap, a couple myth references, a dope flow, metaphors, deep descriptions. the list goes on for black. go fuck yourself, hof style
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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    yo bob why havent we collabed?

    get at me patna
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    Re: Black - “Blissful Ignorance”

    yeah this was dope.
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