Beauty

[SquareRootGenius]

Beauty has many different shapes and sizes
Comes in different packages with different prizes
Beauty can be a flower with misleading appearences
Like a serpent in the grass when it hiss you ain't hearing it
Or beauty can be right before you up to you to see it
Sad how people miss this beauty veiled in secrets
True beauty hides in sheep's clothing very humble
Not craving for attention just compassion in a bundle
Beauty is the interpretation of the eyes of the beholder
Depending on the personality of your soul is how you'll judge "her"
Beauty can be your actions in movement at first
Because we all know that actions speak louder than words
Beauty is whatever the person may depict it to be
For she has many forms she isn't bound she is free
As for me, beauty is something that gracious
A geiune gem in a sandpit maybe a little flirtacious
The essence of beauty may come in different varieties
But without it we would be a dark void society

[SquareRootGenius]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...284/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...289/index.html

thanks - Kao

[SquareRootGenius]

thanks kao? Lol I knew I needed these links if not open mic...common sense lol

[SquareRootGenius]

No comments? Guess this post is done

[Kaotic Theory]

ok this seemed more of a speech/statement of your opinion on beauty which is cool but man first i must point out the fact that some wording is definatly forced and not need man you just need to let it flow, dont try too hard its not needed, some lines were ok though like this one-i liked...
Beauty is the interpretation of the eyes of the beholder
but to many of's made it seem weird...next time try something like..
Beauty is the interpretation in the eyes of the beholder
sounds better...meh you'll catch on, i still lack in that department sometimes too man.
the imagery was simple but ok....you have alot of potential-keep writing my friend.

-Kao

[Smiless]

This was a little difficult for me to get into, I guess some of it just seemed like maybe it wasn't fitting of yourself...like you just picked a topic and made yourself write about, I did like the concept though and think it could be great if you wrote it smoothly... Keep writing things always get bettter with time

[SquareRootGenius]

sorry I took a while to comment back...been busy, but I thank Kao and smiless for the feedback, ill try my best not to force rhymes out to get it done

[CLA919]

What up Root... they are MEANNNNNNNN in here!!!!!!!!!!!! ... great poem btw ;o)

[SquareRootGenius]

Sup cla, ya there are some who think they are better than the rest but better to have confidence then none at all. Most feedback in my opinion are legit "improving" comments