So Crazy Freestyle

[CEF]

^^Instrumental^^

ZOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM yeah thats the car sound//
flow so hot i can light up cigars now//
congratulate i'm glad you hate//
get them guns masturbate then ejaculate//
meaning i'm bustin, im always in to somethin//
CEF that young nugga ya girlfriend bumpin//
yall soft like dumplings i just b pumper//
no porn star but i smash ya girl no pumkins//
and thats so crazy, wait i mean brazy//
west side of tha s, where i b daily//
dope fiends pay me, but i dont slang drugs//
my flwo just crack, no cocaine buzz//
and im fly so the bitches know its on//
thick joint skin yellow like emoticon//
bottles of that hen blakk i get my pourin on//
and she be like i choose you like a pokemon//

verse 2

lil mama know how to work it im certain she flirtin//
ima the clit plzr them other niggas jerkin//
she got on a lil skirtin and pulled up on purpose//
ima take to the crib and twerk till she squirtin//
i told her back it up and dump like the pump//
she told me Cef baby you could do what u want//
so i told her take it off cuz baby ima boss//
all them other niggas do is just front//
i dnt make it rain, i make it hurricane//
zombie wit the ladies i only want you for the brains//
briefcase and button ups i give you the business//
and give a lil milk for ya kitten ya DIG IT//

[MC Mindful]

Right on man, Ill give it a solid 3.9

Your vocab could use some touchin up. Good flow, I liked the use of a few multis in there. Its a start!

I would never use pocketman in a rhyme.. It doesn't sound good or look good at all.

Also, I would refrain from the words 'niggas' as fillers. only a few Lyricists can get away with that. And chances are, you are not of african american descent and would never use that word in public anyhow.

Keep it up!

[CEF]

thanks for the feed

and yeah i'm not of african decent

im jamaican lol

jamaicans still get the pass right we can say nigga lol

but yeah good looks fam

[Ebss Excel]

that was,,, iiiight? Rate it 4.5

I think you was a little bleak, not much creativity & such. But your rhyming scheme was almost on point. LOL.. you sound like a thug gangster? haha.

The multi's were the highlight of you limelight, but you do rhyme tight, but in all honesty like Twiglight, it's just not my type.


^ Sorry. Was just messing about, but I hope you got the message brah.

[Esc0BosS]

this might be the most helpful post to you ever...or the most pointless

ZOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM yeah thats the car sound

but start your verse like that??...and most niggas aint gone show a muthafukin ounce of interest,...wetha you deserve that interest or not is up for debate...but atleast give yourself that chance lil niggs #1 stay up dukie

[CEF]

@esc0boss its more of a comercial track feel me i dont wanna get to gritty with it on here like cuz then everyone is gonna be like oh he's a fake thug lol

but yeah check the new just i just dropped like

[Esc0BosS]

nigga, if you thuggin write that thuggin shit, who gives a fuck if niggas thinkin you fronting?...i really dont understand how ya'll how shit so so so...so twisted, but wdeva

just add a lil complexity in your rhymes, just add a bit of anything, there just a lil bland at the moment

take it how you want #1 stay up

[Ebss Excel]

in other words nigga your verses are bleak..

you need too add juice!!!

[Bar-Buryin]

ZOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM yeah thats the car sound//
flow so hot i can light up cigars now//
congratulate i'm glad you hate//
get them guns masturbate then ejaculate


dope fiends pay me, but i dont slang drugs//
my flwo just crack, no cocaine buzz//


i dnt make it rain, i make it hurricane//
zombie wit the ladies i only want you for the brains


Pretty decent for a freestyle.. flow was nice.. more of an audio feel.. some nice lines.. multis was cool.. i felt this man.. stay doin you

RTF
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[Genocide]

lol, simple hood steez, kinda liking the riggity raw content though. fun shit dood. definitely seems mainstreamish