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    What the Heart Holds [ps.repost]

    What the Heart Holds
    ...When the Hands are Empty


    Moments of weakness
    slip through half-closed doors
    as echoes,
    settling into the hollows
    your absence leaves.
    And storms collect atop mountain cheeks,
    threatening to flood you
    from my thoughts.

    On nights like these,
    I return to past charades
    of hand-holding grenades and blitzkrieg kisses,
    obliterated defenses
    in a world turned on its head.

    Once again
    doubt creeps out from corners
    and I curl fetal position between sheets,
    hands wrapped around bent knees;
    lost in my head, retracing the steps of regret
    that left me twisted in the depths of his chasms.

    You know well how he dug inside,
    excavating hope like some grave robber,
    false dreammonger,
    rearranging my mind
    to leave me blindsided.
    Eyes plucked out
    to keep from seeing truth
    tucked into back pockets amidst excuses
    for the many times he tore me open.

    If I am to love you,
    it must be like this:

    broken.

    Cast of plaster around us
    to protect what is damaged.
    For you,
    I am cracking open.
    Fingers deep in chest cavity,
    scraping the remains of disaster
    into something that can beat again.

    Your kiss is shock treatment,
    jump starting flat lines
    chalked around the figures
    of dreams that died daily;
    fingertips erasing prints
    I have worn as shackles.
    Your hands are healing,
    mending cracks in bones and mirrors
    that hold shadows of his reflection.
    For in your eyes,
    I see new destinations.

    And I try...
    I try not to bury you in expectations.

    But you must understand,
    the heart holds very little left.
    For me this is life or death.
    Love turned
    Russian roulette.

    And so I wrap my lips around you,
    praying,
    for another chance to live.








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    Re: What the Heart Holds [ps.repost]

    "the figures of dreams that died daily"

    That line flows like water. This is a really saddening and melancholy poem. At times, I feel the greatest throes of love but they only reflect the disparity of love felt and love lost. I don't know if you know who Regina Spektor is, but when I read your writing, for some reason I hear the words as if sung by her. Your tone and subject matter might be why.
    You're a talent. I hope you start writing more - maybe even an uplifting piece - because I dig your stuff.
    can I kick it?

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    Re: What the Heart Holds [ps.repost]

    i honestly thought you had the better poem out of the two of us. your poetry is poetry, my poetry is...well, i don't really know what the hell to call it. everything i write is real, and unfortunately, it seems that a lot of poets here try to write concepts and topical shit but forget to write about what's true to them.

    you write very well, um, clear-but you don't deviate from your duty as a poet and that is, in part, to write language that is extraordinary. i could tell from the first lines that this piece was going to be a force. it was a pleasure to take you on, it revitalized something in me to feel that someone was able to crush me. i don't feel the same way about poeta, and i am much less motivated to write anything for him. i would have against soulstice.

    the only thing i wanted in this poem of yours, was more vulnerability. but i guess that's a matter of personal taste. i also would like to see more, because you've written something you can be proud of, and i on the other hand, wrote something that i wish to bury.

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    Re: What the Heart Holds [ps.repost]

    Abi I got to say I HUGELY enjoyed this post. I like the vulnerability you re able to express. I personally try to put as much of that in my writing as I can, coz I enjoy the 'truth' that's carried with it. Im not that open even with myself and so there are times I dont enjoy my own writing coz of it. When I achieve it, then I think its is open enough for other readers to enjoy. This is one of those. Among my personal bests from you.
    You took cliches images like '
    Once again
    doubt creeps out from corners
    and I curl fetal position between sheets,
    hands wrapped around bent knees;
    and added things to them that made them so appropriate for re-use.
    Props, M'am

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    Re: What the Heart Holds [ps.repost]

    Yo- this piece was deep, very nice read- there were More feelings and emotions in this poem- rather than thought imo!!!! By that i mean- i feel like u wrote this without hesitation, as if u were in tha poem, living it- feeling it- great job- im def gonna check out some more of ur wrk- keep writing- and expressing urself- true talent here-

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    Re: What the Heart Holds [ps.repost]

    try to keep stuff this old off the front page

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