Lol. Dude stop following me.
Lol. Dude stop following me.
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I see you didn't bother to post that link. Whack.Originally Posted by Truth Iscariot
This is a cypher, obviously I'm just keying up shit. Y
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It never ends with you. I'm not feeding the trolls.
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Ok bro. Key up something with multi's.
Venom is relentless with his idiotic pretenses
More wicked than clansman, witness how the bionic man lynches
I'll walk forever in this desert - endless sand shifted
I'm past gifted with clause to maul you bitches from now till Christmas
My style is distilled vodka from Vladivostok
I like to say fuck the coppers and blow sticky green like rastas
Leave your fucking noodle limper than spaghetti pasta
Inciting drama like mobstas - watcher of the necropolis
It's honest kids I'm quick to slit a wrist on whom
Fuck bitches thick like Adonis is. It's common sense
You're talking more than you're spitting
Walking in livid indifference wreaking from your quivering lips then,
You spew a little line about who you feel is the sickest
Some whimp shit - simple minded unproductive bigot
On some Rocket shippin test dummy the chimp shit.
It's gin rummy I'm clinching the card game has ended
My opponent is winded waiting for me to finish
An example of rhymes he likes and then send it
But is it worth it or Is the effort worthless
What's the purpose of this circle jerking
It would be easier to copy and paste your latest piece
Dropping the name Venom to satisfy the troll at least
Idk what happened there was a growing peace
And now it's carcass is hanging and tarnished amongst groaning trees
Moaning leaves pick up the Melancholy tone and sing
Damn the damned don't know how damaging
It is to see all these wannabe assassin's ravaging
The profession. Minute aggression from idiots who won't listen
To reason. Their mood changes via clock work like the seasons
I'll fight the tides and embrace the ride fully when the sea comes
To swallow me I'm skybound where swallows be
High as fuck following
Me....
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Lol I post and you view all ready. My nuts are flattered and a bit tired.
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You are so predictable. I knew it'd have my name in it lol.
Whatever i'll take a look at it anyways
Ok, fuck breaking this down one by one. I was going too but it got progressively worse as it went along.
You have some multi's in there but man it's really unpolished. I know it's a key and all blah blah but you got some work to do on them end rhymes. Yeah yeah. The smart ass response is to say i have no place to point this out because to you i'm whack blah blah. My skill set is no excuse for you to be whack if that was true. You got work to do. Your ego and acclaim is above your skillset. I'll leave you alone now. Bye.
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@Truth Iscariot
Venom:
People been impressed by the trends i set
I binge the internet just to invent the next
lets not pretend that our skills intersect
or that my drops dont draw more interest
or that im not the cause why you been upset
you may think revenge but whats revenge beget?
when you face infecked penz we end a threat
A shout to them as then, i extend respect
I transcend a vet to a god of text
ya'll never been in depth like this mod'll get
T Eight Hundred Model grit, bravado spit
Terminate the trolls by the toggle switch
exterminate with flows, mind boggled quick
Dog i'm bad to the bone and been so since
the day i was born, performance intense
I'm the bee's knees with a hornets defence...
Look at the difference multi syllable wise. I key'd this in about 10 minutes..maybe 15. I doubt you'll say this is any good but deep down you'll know.
No i didn't key it up right now. Just using it as an example. I'd much rather see something with dope flow and multi's than cat in the hat rhymes but sound intelligent(or attempts to sound intelligent) because you are "hell hardened" like what the fuck?. Content is great but if you can't provide that content with compound rhymes you at a loss. I ain't even sayin you gotta have 12 syllable multi's. A simple two syllable scheme would change my mind about your writing. I failed to find your O.M. HOF piece unfortunately but i suspect it's the same compound lack.
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Your style is tighter. I cannot agree that it makes it a better product than mine. I appreciate your shit for what it is, just like I said in my feedback on your piece last night. You've been coming from thread to thread pointing fingers are whatever you don't deem worthy of your standard. Haha. Regardless i appreciate the attention to my shit, I suppose I can only grow from it right?
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I've been coming thread to thread pointing fingers only as of recently. I'm giving you all a taste of your own medicine. Now you know how it feels to be picked apart and despite your best intentions nothing you do is going to add up to a positive response. I've done nothing initially to deserve the hate i got and that's a fact. How is it that in the start before i conversed much on the site and just stuck to dropping O.M.'s i was well recieved and had people stating i had "real skill"(even stated by some who now hate on me) and then suddenly when i do something they don't like as a mod, they say i'm "low tier" and my feedback isn't worth a damn. Too start with i was told my feedback was an asset to the O.M. and now ya'll flippin around and going back on that over difference of opinion on an unrelated matter.
I enforced the rules as a mod and motherfuckers got butthurt they could no longer post a verse in the O.M. without feeding someone else's work at their own leisure and that's the TRUTH. The people who know me well know i am not normally this way...but you people have forced my hand. I actually don't care if it's stylistically something i like...but one universal agreed upon thing among those of top caliber(eminem, tupac, nas, big L etc etc) is they all use compound rhymes. There is no artist in the top ten conversation or many in the top twenty for that matter that doesn't use multi's. Think about that. There is a good reason for that. I am not so disgusted with you that i can't admit you have some talent..i won't slight you there....but you do lack in multi's and i meant that.
I'm not pretentious. I am not so full of myself as you make me out to be either. Sure, recently i may have been acting that way but that is to make a point. The majority of my time spent on RB has been modest..humble and contributive. I don't go around saying i'm the best writer ever or that i'm better then this guy or that guy. Blah blah. I'm confident in my writing and i do enjoy it but i know i've got much room for improvement but to be slighted because people didn't like how i modded is fucking stupid.
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I Thought u should know im a little bit outta control
But on a positive note ive accomplished monstrous goals
Im still a diabolical soul whos killin his biological code
When my mind is annoyed im quick to flip like two sides of a coin
My actions speak louder than words my honors perserved...
With a powerfurl surge of acts that tower the earth
Turn ya face into saucey spaghetti u cant b at the top cuz we off' d the bosses already
My punches will jog ya memory ur thoughts aint worth a copper penny
Its important that u forfeit the match
cuz i will torture ur fam put torches to ur vital organs n laugh
Leave ur scribbled raps blotched n sketchy ur about as deadly as a toddler resting
My rhymes alter your sight while your at the altar with your wife just remember its not my fault shes a dyke
So much stress ima have ulcers for life
We will rush ya early ta crush the worthy killin rappers n clutchin gurneys..
we aliens death to these fuking earthlings u desperate bunch y u so fukin thirsty
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Im that supernova Recruit Troopa Soulja,
Takin out Brutes as Huge as Boulders
Howitzer leaves your bones split illness atrocious
Focus while I show you how how my scope gets
My reign outdates abel, cain, and moses - lines funkier than halitosis
I surpass these lame fads that lick, gargle, and grope dick
Truth is so sick he might drop kick your punk ass and leave your wig split
From the top rope like randy savage - I'm a manic
Spitting satanic bars, I make noise - my static carves
Into Radio airwaves sedating rap fiends from his to Mars
I'm more renown than the holocaust - a fucking boss who chars
With 400 degree smilies, freestyles kicked with symmetry
I'll drop infinitely despite enemies who aim to offend me
Got verses-a-plenty - and will battle instantly
Motherfucker just @mention me. Crush you vividly
With the illest imagery I'm wise like Socrates
You stay spewing hypocrisy. Quote your best line honestly
I think the site would like to see examples of ample talent with balance
Which dismantles all who challenge the holder of the golden chalice
Who attacks with malice, my rap ballads...
Howitzer leaves your bones split illness atrocious
Focus while I show you how how my scope gets
My reign outdates abel, cain, and moses - lines funkier than halitosis
I surpass these lame fads that lick, gargle, and grope dick
Truth is so sick he might drop kick your punk ass and leave your wig split
From the top rope like randy savage - I'm a manic
Spitting satanic bars, I make noise - my static carves
Into Radio airwaves sedating rap fiends from his to Mars
I'm more renown than the holocaust - a fucking boss who chars
With 400 degree smilies, freestyles kicked with symmetry
I'll drop infinitely despite enemies who aim to offend me
Got verses-a-plenty - and will battle instantly
Motherfucker just @mention me. Crush you vividly
With the illest imagery I'm wise like Socrates
You stay spewing hypocrisy. Quote your best line honestly
I think the site would like to see examples of ample talent with balance
Which dismantles all who challenge the holder of the golden chalice
Who attacks with malice, my rap ballads...
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the intoxicants sank in, how many shots has he drank?
he'll rub you out, leave you petrified like a sockpuppet wank
you get shot in the face like a cocksuckin' skank
i mean you get shot by a load, she gets shot with a blank
for not chalking up bank, yes its a shock but a prank
you oughta just thank god that i'm droppin this dank document, I sharpened it, yank
out this shank lodged in your flank 'cause of it
i lacerate haters who bring an oxygen tank, toss the shit off of the ship
and have them walking the plank
I walked up the ranks
and watched as the continents shrank underneath my moccasins, now i'm rockin an ankh
I reserve a seat in eternity and third-degree burn emcees who deserve to be hurt infernally
a god on a merciless murder spree that fought off the serpent's insurgency until its servants learned to refer to me as the father of Earth's fraternity
Im so dangerous i come with a fuckin' Warning Sign
Walk all over me n ull b caught slippin like a Poor Floor Design
A War Horse i Ride when i step in the Midst of Battle
Its Unnatural when i Spit its similar to a Camel
Outfitted for the worst but i always Expect the Best
Was told ta Protect ya Neck, by my man Inspectah Deck
In Death i will live how i did in my past life
Sittin with Satan, but im my own Anti-Christ
Understand at Times i Might lose some Self Respect
Only because the cards that were dealt to me they were stacked Against
Back up in the Trench with my Back Against the Fence
I start to lose Track of my exact Quest for Common Sense
As i give a Play by Play of my Day to Day Routine
At night i Lay Awake trippin off Stay Awakes To Take Away my Dreams
And so it Seems my Seams are startting to fall apart from my Genes\Jeans
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Im that supernova Recruit Troopa Soulja,
Takin out Brutes as Huge as Boulders
^"slacks off" so he claims,
has sloth cuz the game exhausted his frame
the flow no longer froths in veins
i saturate his rotten remains
in a broth then wring the thing in a cloth and it drains
the twists will staunch ya
you're imagining the snapping sounds of your gristle aren't ya?
i listen to a magic conch shell that tells me to missile launch ya
my fists will want to greet you when you hit Sri Lanka
my rhymes they Grande like Ariana, they hit ya like a spliff of ganja,
they deeper than the voice of Tay Zonday on marijuana reciting mystic mantra
any opposing forces will be band/banned together in a list that's contra,-a-few-were
forcing me to take drastic measures like a risky entrepreneur
[(from this point downwards I'm dissing no one in particular)]
your talent is crap, you're a savant of manure,
not even that, a dilettante with a flow drawn from the sewers,
your shit doesn't stick to anonymous viewers, you're falling off of their skewers
i'll make you crawl in a coffin and glue your body into it
i get knotty with ropes and you get seduced with a noose
i kick verses with a technique that coulda given Bruce Lee a boost
i'll kick your caboose for its profuse leaking of juice
which produced your rap papers, then I charge your ass with loose-leaf abuse
I'm not truth seeking, I'm too steeped in acoustical tunes to do proofreading
I'll be nude, streaking, a loon leaping on roofs, roosted in a cocoon of gloom, freezing
as I resume trickling booze through ya ceiling keeping it seeping-
into the rooms, reeking, imbuing your little coop until a canoe's needed
I soon inebriate dudes with the brew; it'll induce weeping
I'm the new "sweeping" typhoon, my broomstick will doom weaklings
give a new meaning to a beating, leave 'em bruised, bleeding
and through sneezing I treat them to a monsoon, even
when I yawn, and upon deep breathing
i keep breeding, i spawn freak demons:
hoofed beings drawn from your mom's womb seeded;
whenever this dude's speaking confused feelings simply consume meetings,
I'm sick of this spoon feeding
I'm the flu sneaking into immune people, by noon I'll be through seizing cerebral folds
if the moon is full I'll lose control and easily conclude your soul's human role
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Human role? I'm above that. I'm superhuman bro
Kicking lucid flows from now till when the cows come home
Top of the totem pole I'm in my zone dialing in like telephones
Often gone from a sober state of mind when anxiety climbs
Out from the hole that it so often resides it's no surprise
That you can surmise I'm the great by latest shit
The first 16 probably be more polished than your greatest hits
Throwing punches at me? Homie that's a blatant miss
Your anxiousness sets you apart on my radar therefore I deflect attempts
Aimed at me. I maim amply - severing spinal cord
I'm a primal force snapping necks with Power Rangers Dino Force
My voice is hoarse from yelling obscenities of course
I fly higher than Obi Wan while waging imperial star wars
I come tour DE force like overplayed critic Metaphors
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Werr u dissing me onceawhile?
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Im that supernova Recruit Troopa Soulja,
Takin out Brutes as Huge as Boulders
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