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    Hands on the Wheel

    Hands on the Wheel


    Truth is weed and brew just is how my summertime do
    11am wilen out, puff a blunt a heinekin too
    Keep me straight until 4:22
    Life as Qs55 was just a one when trick turns bitch
    Trying to play me like she ain’t the snitch
    Fuck around and get the GB ditch
    Bitches, bitches, bitches, got to put one down to make them shine
    Truth is they feel my fire in every other line
    But the get right aint anything like theirs I do mine
    Lunatic, the addict can stop any time
    Switch it up, light it up, pop it down or fight it with rhyme
    Ordering coronas with lemons not limes

    Chorus

    Roll it up, take a hit, pass it around, light a cigarette
    Take a shot, and pass it again – lights go down at 2am
    This is just our winter nights, our circle crew yeah we owe you
    To demonstrate how the ghost can do, inebriated between the two
    Always around corners, it’s just how this game can do
    We got your bitch and her lame little crew
    Either way the blame lands on me or falls on you
    To put to shame just what they’ll do
    And don’t tell me cause maybe I’ll tell you
    3rd world order, yeah I’m kinda high
    Under what merit can your trick drive by
    Evil is as evil do, and fuck you bitch maybe I O U
    Hands on the wheel it’s either you or me
    When the vision gets blurry and I can’t see

    Chorus

    Spring time come and it’s time to grow
    Get the finance up, and make the dough
    Time to airout, detox the flow
    Bringing out that 3 day blow
    Oh you think that I don’t know
    How’d you think the guide would show?
    Oh he thought that I can’t throw
    Did he not see my black crow
    Fuck the fire and fuck the light
    Let’s get high every night
    Reel it in, and stop on sight
    Save it for a party night
    Every season there’s an autumn too
    If you took the oath like the players 2
    Then just don’t tellem how bad girls do
    Surrender now and go on through
    Life for me is just fun and jokes
    Tell me how it is for your other folks
    Take to the rarest of rare
    Smoke um out everywhere
    I don’t care if it’s weed or brew
    Top or bottom you know how we can do

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    Re: Hands on the Wheel

    @ILLunatic ... teach me?

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    Re: Hands on the Wheel

    I'm not a fan of the content. I like imagination drops.. haha but with that been said, i think it was good.. a little meta here and there will help you out a lot.
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    Re: Hands on the Wheel

    Yeah, I need to spend time perfecting rather then just airing out... I kinda understand you there

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    Re: Hands on the Wheel

    try to find a diction first cause the idea was just all over the place to be honest but word shit was vibin on some west coast type shit but it was just ideas... nothing real solid and based. the content was just too translucent and dry in a sense.... read some of the OM's around to try and grasp the art of storytelling but props on this and i see potential and the fact you want to elevate then sure thing my friend
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    Re: Hands on the Wheel

    Quote Originally Posted by CLA919 View Post
    @ILLunatic ... teach me?
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    Re: Hands on the Wheel

    I think she wants your 'expert opinion'...

    LOL

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    Re: Hands on the Wheel

    I couldn't really get the flow of this unfortunately...

    Structure was low, flow was low, your meaning was low and you seemed to use run ons.

    I don't know if I'm wrong with this but your gonna need more practice with this one in mind. Only this one CLA919.
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    Re: Hands on the Wheel

    Upping this one... every other line made sense too
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