erratic vs knowp

[Excide]

btw, a bar in music has nothing to do with lines.

[Jcorm]

you're a snitch the way you love the judge is mental
thats why on the forums you're so judgmental
This is more of a statement with wordplay, no punch here
you can go fuck yourself like masturbation
cus These shitty policy on here you mandating
got you acting homosexual sucking cock you man dating
Again you have put more force in wordplay than the punch
I'm a homophobic cus im burning this flamin faggot
cus he thinks he's dope and i have a drug habit
your flow shit you write your verses in the toilet
I'm not sure what your attaching toilet to
thats why you know pee, u only behind p
like order alphabetically in your head sativa medically
..

The structure of your verse doesn't allow me to follow your flow

ure a gossiper whos week, u don't want the beef
ironically after this right hook from me, you'll have to keep an err to the street
Cool
punches landing from left to right, you'll go to sleep early tonight
you'll have red eyes every day without even catching one of those flights
Cool
niggas think ive lost it, pfft that'll get you tossed, scrapp
forget champ,
youre getting cut out the scene soo fast they'd think I had a crop app
Cooler
kp bring fear to lives, uppercuts making bodies fly
last time erratic broke a chin, he probably one them on GTA 5
lol
everything you drop is old, might as well own a funeral home
on RB you're the walking dead
and get bodied soo much u could be an extra on that show
Cool

Erratic- Structure your verse better

This was creative....ish but I can't find the flow
you can go fuck yourself like masturbation
cus These shitty policy on here you mandating
got you acting homosexual sucking cock you man dating

As oppsed to KnowP
niggas think ive lost it, pfft that'll get you tossed, scrapp
forget champ,
youre getting cut out the scene soo fast they'd think I had a crop app

Vote- KP

[Amen]

you're a snitch the way you love the judge is mental
thats why on the forums you're so judgmental

- Meh, statement'ish. Not effective.

you can go fuck yourself like masturbation
cus These shitty policy on here you mandating
got you acting homosexual sucking cock you man dating

- Not effective, weird scheme you have here. Work on your set ups and concepts.

I'm a homophobic cus im burning this flamin faggot
cus he thinks he's dope and i have a drug habit

- Not effective, statement'ish.

your flow shit you write your verses in the toilet
thats why you know pee, u only behind p
like order alphabetically in your head sativa medically

- Flipped concept from about 1996. Not effective.

Overall: You need to work on some fresh concepts. Flow is there, but you are lacking the key components of a BATTLE VERSE. No concepts and the ones you did have were worded poorly. You also have to work on your structure, this piece had no structure. So basically, work on your structure, concepts, set ups and you should be good to go. Keep writing and elevating, bruh.

[vs]

ure a gossiper whos week, u don't want the beef
ironically after this right hook from me, you'll have to keep an err to the street

- Eh, pretty basic rhyme scheme and IMO, I feel you could have worded this a little better. Flow is a bit stretched.

punches landing from left to right, you'll go to sleep early tonight
you'll have red eyes every day without even catching one of those flights

- Ehhh, statement'ish.

niggas think ive lost it, pfft that'll get you tossed, scrapp
forget champ,
youre getting cut out the scene soo fast they'd think I had a crop app

- Seen these concepts flipped a few times, could have been effective if worded differently, IMO. Cool, I guess.

kp bring fear to lives, uppercuts making bodies fly
last time erratic broke a chin, he probably one them on GTA 5

- Don't like this, think you could have worded it a tad bit better.

everything you drop is old, might as well own a funeral home
on RB you're the walking dead
and get bodied soo much u could be an extra on that show

- Stretched, flow is off but I see the concept, could have been more effective if worded differently.

Overall: Pretty weak verse. I'm sure you put forth little to no effort considering your opponent really had nothing against you. But you definitely took this hands down. Some OK'ish concepts but lacking the precised wording to make them effective.

Vote: KnowP
Why?: Overall better verse out of the 2 verses. Jabs at most from KnowP where his opponent didn't have any. Structure on both verses were bad, IMO. Flow was also all over the place for both Textcee's.

[erratic]

btw, a bar in music has nothing to do with lines.

so are you saying rap not music then ? cus a bar in music a bar in rap it the same thing dumb ass. that's why you rap in notes like a drums 8th notes 16 notes and 32 notes. if two lines equal a bar then some ones fucking retarded cus one word can be a bar in rap/music. you realize when you talking about rap you're talking about music. if you said a poem then yeah you would be right.

[Amen]

so are you saying rap not music then ? cus a bar in music a bar in rap it the same thing dumb ass. that's why you rap in notes like a drums 8th notes 16 notes and 32 notes. if two lines equal a bar then some ones fucking retarded cus one word can be a bar in rap/music. you realize when you talking about rap you're talking about music. if you said a poem then yeah you would be right.

I think he meant in "Textstyle" format.

1 Bar = 2 Lines (Set up Line for the Punch)

That's what 99.9% of all Textcee's go by. It's just how Text Battling structure has evolved over the years.

I see what you are saying however, this isn't an AUDIO battle. It's Battling via TEXT.

[Fresh]

you're a snitch the way you love the judge is mental
thats why on the forums you're so judgmental
Weak, the wordplay didn't work for me, and the punch didn't land.0.5/2
you can go fuck yourself like masturbation
cus These shitty policy on here you mandating
Huh? No.. You get a .5 for the go fuck yourself part0.5/2
got you acting homosexual sucking cock you man dating
I'm a homophobic cus im burning this flamin faggot
This makes no sense, but I'll give you a 0.5 for the hell of it0.5/2
cus he thinks he's dope and i have a drug habit
your flow shit you write your verses in the toilet
nahh weak sauce dude0.5/2
thats why you know pee, u only behind p
like order alphabetically in your head sativa medically
Well this was better because you had a concept kinda, but it was still horrible1/2

erratic you get a 3/10, and thats generous.

ure a gossiper whos week, u don't want the beef
ironically after this right hook from me, you'll have to keep an err to the street
Meh1/2
punches landing from left to right, you'll go to sleep early tonight
you'll have red eyes every day without even catching one of those flights
Not bad not great either1/2
niggas think ive lost it, pfft that'll get you tossed, scrapp
forget champ,
youre getting cut out the scene soo fast they'd think I had a crop app
hehe not bad1.5/2
kp bring fear to lives, uppercuts making bodies fly
last time erratic broke a chin, he probably one them on GTA 5
alright the concept is there but the punch was meh0.5/2
everything you drop is old, might as well own a funeral home
on RB you're the walking dead
and get bodied soo much u could be an extra on that show
hehe decent closer1.5/2

KP you get a 5.5/10

KP you verse wasn't great, but more than enough to take care of erratic.

erratic, your concepts are way too simple and the ones you are coming up with are worded horribly wrong. Keep at it though you'll get the hang of it.

No explanation required KP took this with ease.

v/KnowP