Deadly Lyricist

[ChosisDaKid]

need some feedback on my latest track. It isn't any studio quality recording or anything, just me at home rapping on my mic.
[SC]https://soundcloud.com/chosisdakid/deadly-lyricist[/SC]

[Blackflags]

First of all, welcome to the site. We have some rules in this forum, so I'm not sure if you've read over them. We'd be more than happy to give you some feedback, but it's a requirement that you give it to other's first and show proof of it. I'll need 2 links from you of feedback or I will have to close this thread. Thank you.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...p-Instructions

[ChosisDaKid]

First of all, welcome to the site. We have some rules in this forum, so I'm not sure if you've read over them. We'd be more than happy to give you some feedback, but it's a requirement that you give it to other's first and show proof of it. I'll need 2 links from you of feedback or I will have to close this thread. Thank you.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...p-Instructions

ok I understad

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...t-Me-(Decoded)

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...ed-Fantasy-F4F

Also can you reopen my thread called Lyrical Display? http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...-some-feedback

[Blackflags]

Sure thing. Thank you very much for taking the time to do this!

[Daz]

the beat is cool, sounds like old hip hop shit from the 90's. the faulty is horrible, but you said that first. the lyrics were okay, but the flow was way too choppy. you have to work on your delivery seriously. too many lines were rushed or crammed in

[Brother Blue Collar]

i can hear the potential, keep at it. just gotta focus on sounding comfortable, and falling in with the beat more, i have/had the same problem. it always came out best when i just rigorously kept re-recording it over and over again. anything that doesn't seem obsess over it.

[Pair-A-Dyce]

Quality aside, I think you were trying too hard to rhyme and not rap. I feel like I tell a lot of new folks that but it's so true. It can be a hard concept to grasp, sometimes you have to listen to other that you admire to really understand.