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    ::..VOCABULUS..:: 143's Avatar
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    He

    he smiles at me
    the affirmation that the day was good
    his hands swallowed by my palms
    he giggles at me

    he walks proud that he is here
    steps of confidence erecting and strengthening
    he spouts wildly how the day should end
    how we should get drunk with Sunkist Orange Drink and Lay's Potato Chips
    then he redirect to getting my butt whooped in madden
    planning the time has got him juiced

    through the rambling he stops and hug me
    tell me that he love me
    i'm the best
    he ever had....lol
    like he had others
    but i feel that he truly trust me
    he truly want me to be every dream he has of me
    and i will be his every adventure and his prayer bench
    he knows my love.....

    i'm his only superhero

    and who he is.......

    he is my son

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...-I-Lost-in-You

    http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?473106-Lost

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    Oh wow. I have no words.
    That was like a stream of light flowing through me, that flow, those words, that intrigue.
    You threw me. So far, with these words. And then, at the end, you killed me.
    I feel like I've 'been through something'. And I'm numb, because of it.
    It's so bloody good.
    I'm so, ... forget it.
    Jealous. lol
    Words move people. Your words just did that.
    Beautiful read.

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    How can this sit?
    Come on people.

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    Re: He

    hey a poem, awesome, I forgot ppl did them on these things.

    this was good, too high to even begin to explain why and i will promise to come back and leave feed but i will probably forget but i promise i will come back and leave feed.

    but if i don't, this was very good.

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    4th or 5th time reading this so I apologize about not feeding a long time ago. This was so ill. I loved it. As I said in the mag, the emotions felt here cannot be fabricated and as a parent (I've got a daughter who turns 4 in a month) I can thoroughly dig the principle of this piece. I really think you hit the nail on the head when it comes to parenting. I have a poem about my daughter I wrote some while ago that this reminds me of, I must say you executed the idea better than I did lol. This has already been nom'd and is more than worthy of it. Props 143 I hope to see a lot more poetry from you in the future

    AI

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