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    I don't want to fight

    Even the deepest of minds can find relief in a rhyme
    This didn't start with rap, we are a people - aligned
    Thru history, experience, passion and grief have combined
    To ease the gnashing of teeth, and cease the lashings that beat
    From behind the walls of deceit, installing release with a line
    I hear the words call in my sleep, but I'm blind
    When I'm awake, standing tall on my feet - it's a sign
    Consciousness is overrated, dreams are where hope is naked
    We see them bare, trying to breathe this air could choke the sacred
    I'm a leader - scared, but with a potent cadence
    Glowing - fragrant, trying not to grow impatient
    Tho I feel like I'm dying, I'm sighing - and I'm so complacent
    Overblown and blatant ego decodes the latent soul that's vacant
    A little known aqquaintance from a different me that still exists
    But is never seen, it's filled with mist, the lover who killed the kiss
    It's smothered, I hid it away, so another instilled the bliss
    My world is falling apart, and I'm calling it art
    It isn't just writing, this is the pain forming a ball in my heart
    Thoughts are swarming where the demons crawl, and it's dark
    Sometimes I'm feeling tall, other times I'm weak and small
    Smothered by a life that would make any other guy cease and fall
    But I'm about to release the dog, I've just found the piece, the cog
    To make this machine heave and cough, before it kicks into life
    And recedes the smog, I'm leaping the tallest buildings in one bound
    What's up now? Now that The King is back, your mouth is shut?
    Wow...you spoke the loudest when my mind was full of clouds and stuff
    But I get it, now that I'm out, it's tough...lil faggot, fucking powderpuff
    I thought you might have something to say bitch, you run ur mouth enough
    Now you're wandering about like 'fuck', I've got that thunderous clout
    You aren't about nothing, you're a punk with a pout
    See I can be the poet, the dumb guy, and the funny dude
    But you'll know it when I run by, you're scum, you're food
    Now I'm the reincarnated beast that carves hatred
    Into these streets that bleed from scars; faded
    Over the years, and sometimes when I'm sober the tears
    Take me over, as I look to the sky when I'm alone and it's clear
    Wishing for peace upon a star, or just a little piece of all the wealth
    Because I don't want to fight anybody any longer...least of all myself.

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    Re: I don't want to fight

    This was raw fam. I forget what a great you writer you are until i read some ill ass drop from no where like this. Again, another dope piece that's slept on. Definitely something that sets the bar imo. Nothing bad to say about this man. got freestylish near the end but i still messed with it though. Great job dog. keep em coming.


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    Re: I don't want to fight

    Had me hooked in immediately. You have a near perfect balance of poetic approach with a rap vibe, Topical writing 101 really. Flowed smooth throughout not a single hiccup really. Wording was powerful not a single word out of place. Like Knowp said there wasn't any flaw in this. Great writing and makes me want to come way hard on my next drop.

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    Re: I don't want to fight

    Fresh... Liked how you wound your schemes together, rhymes were idk- unanticipated? Really like the machine heave & cough line
    I only stop by to look through you.





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    Re: I don't want to fight

    Great use of words here. Flow is spot on. It all helps the imagery so much when it's like that.
    It's so nice to read something and not stagnate on little words, excess wording that isn't really
    needed at all.

    'See I can be the poet, the dumb guy, and the funny dude
    But you'll know it when I run by, you're scum, you're food
    Now I'm the reincarnated beast that carves hatred
    Into these streets that bleed from scars; faded
    Over the years, and sometimes when I'm sober the tears
    Take me over, as I look to the sky when I'm alone and it's clear
    Wishing for peace upon a star, or just a little piece of all the wealth
    Because I don't want to fight anybody any longer...least of all myself'

    That's so cool. You have some great phrases in this.

    I like the raw factor in this piece. Bit of ego, reflection, it's got a lot to it.

    Great read Witty

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    Shit was dope brah...was really vibing to this jawn. You got nice wording and complex schemes that blend ever so smoothly. This was the best piece I've come across. Glad to see netcees didn't ruin ur writing ability due to trolls

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    Re: I don't want to fight

    every aspect of this was un flawed poetic rhyme the balance of 2 worlds normally influenced by each other but not spoken the same way.
    It's smothered, I hid it away, so another instilled the bliss
    My world is falling apart, and I'm calling it art
    It isn't just writing, this is the pain forming a ball in my heart
    Thoughts are swarming where the demons crawl, and it's dark
    Sometimes I'm feeling tall, other times I'm weak and small
    Smothered by a life that would make any other guy cease and fall
    this was the most artistic part

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