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*hums softly* I feel like free writing something
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-Jake The Cowboy-
As I look out the window I see a bunch of black men
around a white man that was armed but they didn't attack him
He had a bag stashed around his wrist gripping a hand gun
A man on his knees pleeding to be shot as he stands up.
Another man in orange lays a weapon on the black top
the man seeking death reached for the gun like a wack job
BOOM!
he screamed and grabbed his buttock, as he got his ass shot!
"YOU MOTHERFUCKER!"
yet the cowboy stood his ground yanking the mans badge off
Silence filled the street for a few seconds
The man in the orange picked up the weapon
pointed it at the dead man standing to send a message
He let the cowboy walk away, to prove a lesson
thats when the dead man lost it and got aggresive.
.
.
He screamed
"Jake! - Hey Jake! - Jake! Come back here! - Jake!
Jake! - I need my money! - Jake!"
I heard it sharp and clear as he yelled, and it echoed the block
started telling everyone they're about be behind metal and rot
Pelican Bay to be correct, as he came up with an incredible plot
But it seemed noone wanted to watch as they left him with god
He yelled,
"KING KONG AIN'T GOT SHIT ON ME!"
Those were the last words that i heard as i seen a smile scrape his face
That's when my mom came, picked me up, and took me to play.
A memory I will never forget of a cowboy winning over the gang.
Until this day I still wonder what happened to the man that walked away
...I was just a boy starring out the window
...when I saw a white man with boots -
...He was holding a black bag and a pistol
...the image still has me confused
"Mom, what happened to Jake the Cowboy?" He asked
http://youtu.be/EwnP7jhTrlQ
if your lost - at the end of the scene there was a boy in the window.... im telling it from his point of view.
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can you leave open so i can get some feed @L.E
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Mic S Wins by No Show. Open for feedback.
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yo mic...
I think this was a well thought up concept, making good use of the new format... it would have been better if you'd have upp'd the technical side of it, it's really basic rhyming for the most part, no crazy flows or flips... I'd concentrate more on that side of things from now on, the other elements are solid, focus on your schemes
............pz
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