truth in lies

[Kuhn]

I'm turning into what I never wanted to be
Like karma's finally punishing me.
I felt like an addict was something funny to see
Till I was wiping powder off my nose and made my company leave
So I could enjoy my buzz without disturbing the peace
But I was hurting on the inside; such a burden/ disease.
Now I'm learning that burning crack ain't far from a perc
When I snort em by the dozen to get my body to work.
I can't function without a discussion about
Getting high all the time till I'm cussin an shout.
The choices I've made on this road to destruction
Have done nothing but solidify every persons assumptions
I'm just an addict that can't hack it when I'm totally stressed
My life is a mess,
I can't cope without coke or a pill to ingest!
I've never been closer to sober than I am right now,
No drugs for a week so its time to bite down.
I gotta simplify everything cuz I wake up bored
But I got to much time that I need to make up for.
Get the bills paid, hit the laundry and grocery store
Actually smell fresh air as if I never noticed before.
My nose was always so full of powder and blood
That I didn't recognize the smell of my wife when we hugged.
The sweetest scents in the world; most would call me a liar,
Was the smell of home cooked food and my daughters dirty diaper.

[Kuhn]

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[Emily]

Day-day, this was really good. You have a flow that sails the seas. Just beautiful.
What I like about your pieces is that you don't try to impress us with rhymes.
You just put your true self down and somehow make it work. Don't get me wrong,
I wouldn't say no to more rhymes, but your flow is so lovely, the end rhymes fit fine,
and your story is the star. So on to that. You've used a concept that has been done
too many times to relay, but as usual, you have a fresh connection to the theme and make
it totally your own. You own it so brilliantly, it's always a pleasure to read your pieces.
This poem in particular was a great read. You display your situation clearly and without
making it look worse than it is. It's not like you're trying to up the ante on the addict.
You just show the true shitty side of 'not being able to smell everyday things because of all
that crap that's numbed your sense of smell'. And I really do like the reflection that you bring with
your last line, showing us, it's the little things that turn out to be the big things in the end.
Another great read.

Good job on this.

[Chipstar]

There was an honesty in this that I liked. I know someone going through a similar situation so this reminded me of her. And in generally it's easy to get caught up in some shit and forget the little things that people take for granted. Nice easy read.

"The choices I've made on this road to destruction
Have done nothing but solidify every persons assumptions"

I liked this.

[Truth Iscariot]

I liked this. Though perfectly fit for OM, it has quite the poetic feel to it. Thus topic has been done a million times but the emotion made it more real than played and kept it fresh. I think that you didn't forsake Rhyme for content and though I'm typically a fan of shorter lines in poetry these long lines you perfect.