I love you because

[Rock girl]

I love you because you make me feel good,
you put a smile on my face when I'm sad.
I love you because you funny,
I enjoy your jokes.
I love you because I can share anything with you,
you are more understanding.
I love you because you there for me,
you protect me from danger.
I love you because you loyal,
I know you'll never break my heart.
I love you because you amazing,
your style is driving me crazy.
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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...02-sing-for-me

[Blanco.]

this was a hott poem bro. the imagry was terrific and bone chilling. props.

[Rock girl]

thanks for the feedback!

[AFox]

Awww...it's cute

[Rock girl]

Thanks

[yas jeshka yaaas]

Hello I am think this open mic am dog shit

[OG Maestro]

^LMAO, IN TEARS!!!

I thought this poem was completely basic and 1-dimensional. And I thought it fulfilled its mission regardless of the lack of aesthetic quality. And that mission was to convey a feeling. That's what was done. So it was successful, you could say.

[Emily]

Boss lady, you seem to have a lot to say, which is great.
I think you could probably be a little more adventurous with your delivery though.
The repeated lines get a bit monotonous for the reader when its set out like this.
But you have some nice sentiments put down, good on you for that.

I love you because you funny,
I love you because you there for me,
I love you because you loyal,
I love you because you amazing,

Regarding the word 'you' in these sentences...I think that
when you're writing something that's not really street, something
romantic especially, the correct terminology should be used.
I don't know if it's an American thing, to use the word 'you' instead of
'you're' but for me it cheapens the piece.
I also think you could have had a stronger last line.
Keep in mind this is just my opinion. Do your thing, whatever makes you happy.

Nice to see you dropping.
Keep it up.

[Tragedian.]

Very cute, and I would accept this with a smile on my face from my lady, but it isn't very good. Far too simple. You could really benefit from figuring out different words to use, and ways to say how you feel, it'll really make your poetry stand out.

But something heart felt isn't about that, our feedback is just merely from a writers side of thing.

[Rock girl]

thanks for the feedbacks everyone!

[For Battling]

This was dope

[Rock girl]

thanks Fern

[whoami]

I echo the general sentiment as expressed by those who actually gave you thoughtful feedback, i.e. NOT jeshka (will someone kill that faggot already). This piece is overly simplistic which is not necessarily a bad thing in itself, but as far as constructive criticism goes in the vain of my writing and reading interests, I definitely enjoy a heightened vocabulary. However, as a little love note from someone significant (as someone else mentioned), this would be awesome to read. The emotion is there for sure - you definitely expressed your love and overall satisfaction. There was also some decent imagery here that I could personally visualize in my head in the sense that it made me reminisce on happier days. As Emily pointed out, I, myself, am typically not a fan of repetition, however, the repetition here actually gave this poem a sense of flow - which I liked. As she also mentioned, I am not a fan of the usage of "you" as opposed to "you are." My OCD radar goes crazy over bad grammar when it comes to writing, but it didn't completely retract from the message of the poem.

Overall, definitely a sweet little piece. Definitely conveyed emotion well as well as some imagery. I recommend on experimenting with different words to add some versatility to your writing and to keep the grammar in check (except in special cases where certain grammar has an added effect, such as some sort of emphasis or exclamation).