The Devil's Testimony

[SELF ACTIVATE]

Who am I? I am the Son of the Morning mourning behind divine bars
Demonized by God for wanting to define stars with time charts
It's hard to find just what my crimes are...bringing light to night
When your mind was...stuck in the dark so blind but I opened those blinds up
by plucking the ripe stuff that hung from the vines of...a righteous tree
Not right to eat but I gave you a bite cuz you had a right to think
And take a seat beside his highness ...Zionist lie when they try to deny us...
A glimpse inside the mind of...this distant giant remiss with violence
Cuz he's a tyrant and here's the science behind 'em
Who banished you from paradise? Cursed your grounds and pregnant wives?
Rid the world of precious lives and did it in a record time?
Committed sins that vexed the mind then wondered why we severed ties
Who sent the tides to flood the shores it's no surprise your loving Lord?
In forty nights he murdered more than all the knights condemned to war?
I tell no lies I cite the source...inside the book you're fighting for?
A legacy of bloody corpses left behind by Heaven's forces
Children died by pain and torture scorched alive inside a fortress...
I'm mortified you buy this horseshit paying tithes despite your poorness
You know I'm right so why ignore it and write it off as unimportant
The Bible tells a different story of wicked Hell a tale so gory
Where devils dwell expelled from glory I've heard it all...so stale and boring
It's all contrived to place the blame of death and pain on Satan's reign
But that's insane who will explain the millions slain in Jesus' name???
Crusading priest on crucibles beat battle drums like musicals
His actions aren't excusable who causes all the funerals?
But I'm the 'beast'? ... Delusional!!!
I came in peace as usual...and set you free to prove to you
I'm not a creep...I'm beautiful...with mu.tu.al respect between
Every living plant and being...so don't believe the text you read
About my 'Evil destiny'

---Lucifer 'Morning Star'


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[Nigma]

Who am I? I am the Son of the Morning mourning behind divine bars
Demonized by God for wanting to define stars with time charts
felt the opening line was a bit wordy but the follow up was nice
It's hard to find just what my crimes are...bringing light to night
When your mind was...stuck in the dark so blind but I opened those blinds up
lack of punctuation annoyed my ocd brain
by plucking the ripe stuff that hung from the vines of...a righteous tree
Not right to eat but I gave you a bite cuz you had a right to think
this was fucking sweet, well done. nice transition as well
And take a seat beside his highness ...Zionist lie when they try to deny us...
A glimpse inside the mind of...this distant giant remiss with violence
multie/wording combo was efficient and came across really nice.
Cuz he's a tyrant and here's the science behind 'em
Who banished you from paradise? Cursed your grounds and pregnant wives?
Rid the world of precious lives and did it in a record time?
flow was really nice but ^ this line needed an extra syllable. something that sounds like 'did the shit in record time' but is less colloquial
Committed sins that vexed the mind then wondered why we severed ties
Who sent the tides to flood the shores it's no surprise your loving Lord?
In forty nights he murdered more than all the knights condemned to war?
I tell no lies I cite the source...inside the book you're fighting for?
A legacy of bloody corpses left behind by Heaven's forces
Children died by pain and torture scorched alive inside a fortress...
I'm mortified you buy this horseshit paying tithes despite your poorness
You know I'm right so why ignore it and write it off as unimportant
really strong all round section, nice writing
The Bible tells a different story of wicked Hell a tale so gory
Where devils dwell expelled from glory I've heard it all...so stale and boring
It's all contrived to place the blame of death and pain on Satan's reign
But that's insane who will explain the millions slain in Jesus' name???
Crusading priest on crucibles beat battle drums like musicals
His actions aren't excusable who causes all the funerals?
But I'm the 'beast'? ... Delusional!!!
I came in peace as usual...and set you free to prove to you
I'm not a creep...I'm beautiful...with mu.tu.al respect between
Every living plant and being...so don't believe the text you read
About my 'Evil destiny'

---Lucifer 'Morning Star'

overall this is a concept and perspective that you'd think would be overplayed but i cant remember reading at all before. well executed, a few minor polish details but still a very consistent and enjoyable.

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[SELF ACTIVATE]

Thanks for the feed bro. I really appericate that. In terms of the punctuation I was kind of slacking...I typed it on my phone...fuckin torture. Good lookin out tho...I noticed some of the things you point out and I agree.

[SELF ACTIVATE]

Bump

[Echelon]

What's up, Self Activate?

This was a pretty dope read, to say the least. You compacted great rhymes with good flow, and good mechanics. This piece is laced with good rhyme scheme and good structure. I enjoy your views on christianity; they're interesting. I don't really agree, that God did that. I believe the devil did. It's a secret mysticism to it; but yeah - it's quite alright. I enjoy the little tangent rhymes you spewed; was quite delightful in it's own way. I don't really see anything wrong with this piece. You maybe could've elaborated on the devilish part of this piece. It isn't lost, but you could've mentioned Beezlebub a few more times. Other than the ending. But this was a nice piece instead. Great job on the imagery as-well. Good work, on this. Hope to read more in the future!