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    How to be a player

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    Liar in red

    Just got bored n keyed this up, first open mic



    Met a nice young tender on tinder it was real discreet
    Tlc relationship,we hadda creep
    every week, I would serve her beef
    Sloppy toppy she ain't need no teeth to eat this meat
    Head so good make a man luv her
    Can't be square cuz from the go she said she had another
    I ask who it was, she said dont matter it ain't ya brother
    She didn't stutter, at this time my life was In The gutter
    Still smooth like butter
    I told the girl I was having rainy days, she said she could make em sunny
    I laughed out loud but she ain't think it was funny
    Look me in my eyes ask what I needed it, I told her money
    Said bring me some the best way you know how
    A hour later she brought me 70 dollars, oh wow
    I'm gonna milk this heifer like a show cow
    She handed it over with no fuss
    Didn't matter how much, I just needed trust
    It felt like a movie
    Told her next move be her best move n chose me
    She said mofo I'm down for you I wanna see you shine
    No matter what I got ya back I'll be ya spine
    She had no idea at this time about this life of crime
    Only thing that mattered was chasing dimes
    I had sold stones to feens but never dreams to a queen
    But I knew I hadda secure this girl on my team
    She had on jeans
    cut the pants legs off,show her naked azz
    Instructed her to stroll the ave and wave as the cars past
    See that 70 was cool but this way you can make money swiftly
    Handed her 4 condoms and told her every 15 minutes bring me fifty
    She took off and I saw her flag a truck down n hopped in as I watching
    10 minutes go by I look at my clock in
    Here she comes handing me 75 I P.ut I.n M.y P.ocket
    Told her get to the next one don't let no thing stop it
    As she ran off, I was approached by a lady named Mimi
    She said, you look out for yo girls, wish that could be me
    I told her she. Could have the world if she could learn French we we
    She gave 770 told me that was a day's earnings
    My other girl came back with another 50 from the tricks she was turning
    Now I'm no sex slave master, girls I just guide ya
    This was the day they chose me as they personal advisor
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    Re: How to be a player

    Technically wasn't all that great. You know as far as technique goes but I enjoyed this alot. There were a few lines that had some humor...

    Lol @ best way know how/ 70 dollars oh wow . That part was cool

    Then the French we we part. Lol

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    Re: How to be a player

    Quote Originally Posted by Attack of the Muff View Post
    Technically wasn't all that great. You know as far as technique goes but I enjoyed this alot. There were a few lines that had some humor...

    Lol @ best way know how/ 70 dollars oh wow . That part was cool

    Then the French we we part. Lol
    Just a key my friend, I vomited all that out. Just tryna do my part n be active

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    Re: How to be a player

    Entertaining drop

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    Don't get my wrong I liked it

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    Re: How to be a player

    Seen o.g dropped some shit thought I'd drop some shit, might hook my mic up n try n spit it

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    Re: How to be a player

    Whatup mofo
    You should def hook up your mic and get things rolling!!
    This was a nice write nd just it not being that serious vibe were all pretty accustomed too it had some good humor in it. Even some lines like sold stones to feens never dreams to queens, that was a little glimpse of some shine.

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    Re: How to be a player

    Lol this was an amusing read. Funny how some of us display stories such as this for some pussy or errand run then pussy.

    This piece almost described on how you can fail in the process if denied comes into play.

    My only suggestion is to add more depth along the storyline. Make it cinematic or flavored imagery so readers can taste the feeling of....yeah I been there yo. Other than that it was a fun read while enjoying every moment.
    The end of a Revelation.... But a Clever Word always illustrated.

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    Re: How to be a player

    Thanks guys.

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