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    Feeling angry and bored

    When war comes, i spit to the rhythm of war drums,
    The steel blade will reduce ya to cold stumps,
    Torso to cold cuts, eyeballs to donuts.
    Im feeling myself like im Goldust, cuz when im flexing my guns im so buff.
    The .38 makes loud noise, nicknamed it Sam Jack cuz it has a loud voice
    Battling me is a bad choice like running up on the presidential convoy,
    You'll get your ass shot im not coy, i cant stand bitches that like to play with grown men like tomboys.

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     Murder The Mainstream Nohbody's Avatar
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    Re: Feeling angry and bored

    Quote Originally Posted by Literal Pete View Post
    When war comes, i spit to the rhythm of war drums,
    The steel blade will reduce ya to cold stumps,
    Torso to cold cuts, eyeballs to donuts.
    Im feeling myself like im Goldust, cuz when im flexing my guns im so buff.
    The .38 makes loud noise, nicknamed it Sam Jack cuz it has a loud voice
    Battling me is a bad choice like running up on the presidential convoy,
    You'll get your ass shot im not coy, i cant stand bitches that like to play with grown men like tomboys.
    i mean . . have we resorted to biting lyrics from Iggy Azalea these days?

    Hold up, niggas start the show when he show up
    With a lot of whores in that tour bus
    Yet I’m still feeling myself, like Goldust
    Last edited by Nohbody; December 16th, 2016 at 02:08 PM

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    Re: Feeling angry and bored

    be creative with your topic & verse
    make your bars longer

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    Re: Feeling angry and bored

    Literal Pete, I like what you do. You obviously have a knack for writing.
    You've got a good grasp of flow and rhyme.
    Shame about the iggy line being a bit close to home.
    Keep in mind that there's a cypher section here in om for small pieces like this.
    Keep dropping Pete. But give us a little more next time.


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    Re: Feeling angry and bored

    YEAHHHHHH!!!!!!!!! i luv it!!! <3 keep it up

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    Re: Feeling angry and bored

    I agree with Emily, you have a knack for writing. Nice small piece with a good rhyming scheme and subject matter, to boot. Overall, it's short as hell, but it's still good for what it is. Keep it up.



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