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    TofW: SELF - SERVIN'

    I wrote this to the beat. I'll probably record it later. Check it...
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    Hit you wit them bars that'll crack ya fuckin' skull
    I'm the sickest wit these lyrics wat I'm spittin' is a cold
    No prescription for the dope, if you listen ya exposed
    'Til ya senses overload and ya itchin' fa sum mo'
    I'm as holy as the Pope when I bless ya wit a quote
    I'm a legend to the cults that be reppin' the occult
    Cos the messages & codes in the letters that I wrote
    Are il•leg•ible to most ... but the RO-Setta Stone
    Is embedded in the flow, press the pedal to the flo'
    If them devils wanna go, make 'em wrestle in the snow
    Melt the glaciers at the poles,'til the ocean overflows
    And the ancient Eskimos ... start escapin' on the boat
    That was frozen long ago ... back when Noah had to float
    Yeah, you know I had to gloat, I be flexin' on them hoes
    You be desperate & you don't, cos ya thirsty like a throat
    In a desert full of smoke ... this election was a joke
    Had us stressin' over votes now we mad at the result
    Cos it's just the status quo & it's neva gone change
    'Less we bang or we revolt like the Haitians on the coast
    When they had to overthrow ... the French from the throne
    Napoleon went broke ... lost his grip up on the yoke
    I can spit that Espanõl, mixed with venom, and Creole
    Santeria when I flow ... here's some Voodoo fa ya soul!
    Prolly spook a fuckin' ghost just fa lookin' at me wrong!
    Have 'em cookin' from the chrome when I light the microphone
    I'm like Michael in the post, middle fingers to Malone
    If I shoot it, I'ma swish it, I ain't never missed a goal!
    My percentage is the biggest, but I split it wit my woes
    All the bitches at my shows, they be drippin' wit the liquid
    Have 'em slippin' on the foam... from my sexy syl•la•bles
    Did I mention I'm the slickest, with this diction, on the low
    Picture Christmas in the Slopes ... I'm a Yeti & I'm deadly
    Cos I'm so Abominable, fuck ya Mummy she's a hoe
    Break them Walls like Jericho, cos she's fuckin' wit the Bull
    From the Land of Derrick Rose, I'm a Pharaoh from the 'GO
    Mississippi I'm the Goat, spent some time in M.I.Yay
    Got acquainted wit the coke, gettin blown in Costa Rica
    Smokin' reefa by the "O", if that chica is a keepa I'ma freaka
    Like J. Lo, even tho she kinda old, like a decade overdue
    But that ass still phat at the age of 42 ... but that bitch is 47!!!
    That's some marinated cooch! But I serenade and soothe
    Every crevice wit my flute, make me barricade the coupe
    Cos they aim'n fa my roof, cos they hate to see me win
    When they bettin' I'ma lose, it's a "Catch 22"
    Cos they catch 22 ... bullet holes to the dome ...
    From these brass .22's ... if they actin' like a fool
    Crackin' atoms after school, cos them teachers
    Couldn't reach me, I was Nietzsche in my youth
    If the money is the ROOT... of .. every .. single .. evil
    Then the Ego ... is the FRUIT, see this Eagle and salute
    Put ya hands on ya heads like a military troop
    Got sum literary proof ... the Messiah was inspired
    By the fire I produced -- when the climate wasn't blue
    But the nitrogen consumed every corner of the sky
    & there was life inside the Moon ... back when Isis told Atum
    That the Christ was comin' soon, I plugged a mic up to the womb
    And give him life in sonic booms ... ~~KABOOM!!!!

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    Re: SELF - SERVIN'

    Self, you're serving up a storm with this one.
    The beat has me hooked. I love the flow, so strong and obvious.
    I've not listened to the music but on the second read I will.
    I'll come back and paste in some favourite lines and leave a few
    more thoughts.
    Good to see you dropping still SELF.
    Always loved your work.


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    Hit you wit them bars that'll crack ya fuckin' skull
    I'm the sickest wit these lyrics wat I'm spittin' is a cold
    No prescription for the dope, if you listen ya exposed
    'Til ya senses overload and ya itchin' fa sum mo'
    See, what you've got here is attitude on paper.
    You've got a grungy vibe spat with a grunt and for me, that works because you're able to carry that mood
    from beginning to end and not drop the act mid sentence. Instead what I'm hearing is a strong accent on paper
    which isn't always easy to do but here I can almost see the dude who's confidence is allowing him to fly in and out of these words.

    I'm as holy as the Pope when I bless ya wit a quote
    I'm a legend to the cults that be reppin' the occult
    Cos the messages & codes in the letters that I wrote
    Are il•leg•ible to most ... but the RO-Setta Stone
    Is embedded in the flow, press the pedal to the flo'
    If them devils wanna go, make 'em wrestle in the snow
    Melt the glaciers at the poles,'til the ocean overflows
    And the ancient Eskimos ... start escapin' on the boat
    That was frozen long ago ... back when Noah had to float
    Yeah, you know I had to gloat, I be flexin' on them hoes
    You be desperate & you don't, cos ya thirsty like a throat
    In a desert full of smoke ... this election was a joke
    Had us stressin' over votes now we mad at the result
    Cos it's just the status quo & it's neva gone change
    'Less we bang or we revolt like the Haitians on the coast
    When they had to overthrow ... the French from the throne
    Napoleon went broke ... lost his grip up on the yoke
    I can spit that Espanõl, mixed with venom, and Creole
    Santeria when I flow ... here's some Voodoo fa ya soul!
    I'm not sure...but I may love you. This is music for my mind to mull over and suss out and then spin out over how well it's done.
    Some people tend to think its easy to write this type of stuff but it's only easy when it slips off the tongue effortlessly which is has here.
    It's only easy for the reader when the flow takes hold and before I know it I'm surfing on your prose, cruising on your smart ass one liners
    and smirking at your ego which is justified. You have so much packed in to one little line...wit...rhyme...flow...imagery, and you do all of those things
    well. If you'd of done a half assed job there'd be no way near the effect you've had here, but as it stands, this is great, Self.
    Here's the thing, I could just keep pasting quotes line by line because I kinda like it all.
    But I won't do that because I've got more feed to give and if I stick around in here I'll be stuffed if I feed anything else.
    I will end though, on a couple of your lines that made me smile for more reasons than what they were meant to...

    Have 'em slippin' on the foam... from my sexy syl•la•bles
    lol love that. And btw, your syl•la•bles are sexy.

    I was Nietzsche in my youth
    to me, you still are.

    Self, this was a lot of fun to read and feed.
    Keep up the good work, you're so entertaining and a huge asset to this place.



    Great Read.

    Thank you.
    Last edited by Emily; December 28th, 2016 at 04:36 AM


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    Thanks Em. I love reading your replies. You dig deep and extract the true meanings beneath each line. The love is mutual.

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    This is great I hope you record this. It was nice reading it to the beat. I won't even quote my favorite verses because there's too many. Definitely not a chore to read your rhymes.

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    Re: SELF - SERVIN'

    Best/Second best flex piece I've seen of the past couple years, this is truly greatness.

    I usually don't see anything I truly like, and I don't remember ever nominating anything but this is one OM I will.

    Most impressive parts was the nice Catch 22 scheme, Eagle and salute was dope, the Haitian revolution reference was beautiful along with the Creole/Santeria shit. A lot of references make flex verses good, but using them in witty ways is the key. I'm happy somebody finally dropped something I can say is HOF-worthy.

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    Best/Second best flex piece I've seen of the past couple years, this is truly greatness.

    I usually don't see anything I truly like, and I don't remember ever nominating anything but this is one OM I will.

    Most impressive parts was the nice Catch 22 scheme, Eagle and salute was dope, the Haitian revolution reference was beautiful along with the Creole/Santeria shit. A lot of references make flex verses good, but using them in witty ways is the key. I'm happy somebody finally dropped something I can say is HOF-worthy.

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    lmao this nigga said put a finger to malone lol! this is a fine clinic on swag and flow, son. Very strong rhythm thought out. The sing songy interweaving scheme moved the piece on another plane where it connect with the inherit rhythm. So youre just waiting for the punch while vibing the rhythm. Normally, shit like this are forced as fuck but i think you incorporated the content well enough that it was able to hold its own with the schemes. read this multiple time and always hyped afterward. good shit, Self.

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    Love it, I agree with the others that I hope this is recorded. The flow in this piece is killer, I mean you murdered the flow. The opening two bars were a great set up as well. Looking forward to more!

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    Never thought I'd live long enough to get a nod from OG lol. Good looking out, bro.

    Em & Sam y'all already know...appreciate the love

    CZ good seeing you around. Thanks for the feed my dude.

    And the same to you Metrics. Good looking out.

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    Up just cause ... I want y'all to read this shit. Feed is appreciated but optional. Just check it.

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    Normally, I try to stick to the rule about NOT upping older pieces. Especially ones that already got HOF because there's the possibility of it bumping a newer piece to the second page where it's likely to go unnoticed. PLUS this is from December... but you gave me an idea so I'll let it slide. I'm gonna sticky this and have it be a "Throwback of the Week" piece. I'll leave feedback in a minute.

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    Hmmmm...

    You know, you're right, bro. I was wondering if that rule still applied. I'm definitely not trying to down and one else's work with my own. So my bad. But good looking out at the same time.

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    This was pretty cool. Lots of creative and dope concepts in here. Flow was smooth from start to finish. There were a couple lines that felt off to me, one being the J. Lo bit. I dunno, that part just got scrambled up as I read. Overall though a cool read, very free style esque.

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