Flowers

[_Lyrics]

Tulips were the first to speak in the spring
she was shy, dominated dormancy
inside most time, but she'll show herself
for a touch of warmth after enduring coldness..

A beautiful little thing that couldn't last
as soon as she's rubbed the wrong way
she's back from where she came
There's no tools to dig her up again..

Then there was Rose, she stole the show
in her ruby reds that kissed her hips
she was hardy and could go for a while
Easy to see why shes a favored variety

One that just couldn't know a gentle touch
yeah, there's times i'm just down to fuck
but sometimes i need more than a thorn.
so i'll save the sentiments, she'll get a prick.

When I met Daphne, she was bigger
but we hit it off, i seen something in her
gave her what she wanted, she got trim
and bloomed her best once she was thin

I've got no problem cutting a bush
or obsessing over someone that looks.
Cant keep shaping things the way she wants
without getting the birds and bees involved..

Around Daphne, crept Heather
who was stepped on quite a lot
but it just made her stronger and also kind of hot
we had a lot of ground to cover...

troubled by respecting some borders
everything around us was an edge she was over
outrageous in every new place she was took
wanted to touch everything, just couldn't stay put

cat fight, saw Susan when she was black eyed
man looked like he wanted to jump in
when i said "your not gonna be that guy"
watched me take Heather then I couldn't get her away

She did better, just needed someone supportive
broken potential she can grow from, unnoticed
still remember your yellows in rays from the sun
he loves you, just has trouble cultivating your love

she knows im there to help and tend as a gardener
but there's other Flowers like when i met with Veronica
who once made me think there aint another to turn to
had me feeling higher than royalty, her color was purple

It was like she couldn't stop, i was really impressed
was never serious except where it'd be next
there was never anything I was against us trying
but I couldn't stop thinking about her sister Violet..

I didn't try it, the temptation was building
in a face that was grinning, i hate to admit it
naughty by nature, it keeps me quite aroused
laying in an open field, thinking about the flowers..

[Sammy]

really great idea here, man.

love how each flower inherit qualities of each female characters. creative. also dug how you kept the flower concept going without hurting the message or plot. it late and im a bit tired so apologize for the lazy feed but i'll be back for a more detailed feed.

[Emily]

Tulips were the first to speak in the spring Stunning line Lyrics. Great opener.
she was shy, dominated dormancy dominated dormancy was great.
inside most time, but she'll show herself that's quite sweet.
for a touch of warmth after enduring coldness..

A beautiful little thing that couldn't last
as soon as she's rubbed the wrong way
she's back from where she came
There's no tools to dig her up again..What a great stanza. This whole stanza is gold.

Then there was Rose, she stole the show Yeah, she does do that.
in her ruby reds that kissed her hipsNice. very nice wording.
she was hardy and could go for a whilewoohoo!
Easy to see why shes a favored variety lol clever.

One that just couldn't know a gentle touch
yeah, there's times i'm just down to fuck
but sometimes i need more than a thorn.
so i'll save the sentiments, she'll get a prick.lol. Great stuff here.

When I met Daphne, she was bigger
but we hit it off, i seen something in her
gave her what she wanted, she got trim
and bloomed her best once she was thin lol These female characteristics you're bringing to light are inspiring. The way you make them come alive is wonderful.

I've got no problem cutting a bush
or obsessing over someone that looks.
Cant keep shaping things the way she wants
without getting the birds and bees involved..Lyrics, you're a mad man. One with talent and a savvy nature.
And one that can pull poetry out of petals and pubes. I gotta hand it to ya.

Around Daphne, crept Heather
who was stepped on quite a lot
but it just made her stronger and also kind of hot
we had a lot of ground to cover...I like how you've painted these stories with a brush thats so delicate at times, and rough other times.
But more than that you cover the whole canvas with your talent and knowing of these beautiful, beautiful images.

troubled by respecting some borders
everything around us was an edge she was over
outrageous in every new place she was took
wanted to touch everything, just couldn't stay put the subtle rhymes work well here i think. not too obvious, instead soft and delicate like the
subject matter youre speaking of.

cat fight, saw Susan when she was black eyed
man looked like he wanted to jump in
when i said "your not gonna be that guy"
watched me take Heather then I couldn't get her awaylol how do you think of this stuff? its so animated in my mind.
the cat fight is genius.

She did better, just needed someone supportive
broken potential she can grow from, unnoticed
still remember your yellows in rays from the sun Omg, this stanza, the words in this stanza are so good.
he loves you, just has trouble cultivating your love but his last line, is something else.

she knows im there to help and tend as a gardener
but there's other Flowers like when i met with Veronica
who once made me think there aint another to turn to
had me feeling higher than royalty, her color was purple This piece reminds me of a song. And the beat is playing in my head while I read this.
And it goes really well lol. Anyway, that last line in this stanza was solid. Left me feeling a certain type of nostalgia which is odd but i think that royalty line
was really different, but also it had a .....ugh...familiar sense about it, if that makes any sense at all.

It was like she couldn't stop, i was really impressed
was never serious except where it'd be next
there was never anything I was against us trying
but I couldn't stop thinking about her sister Violet.. lol. love it. Top lines here.

I didn't try it, the temptation was building
in a face that was grinning, i hate to admit it
naughty by nature, it keeps me quite aroused
laying in an open field, thinking about the flowers..I take my hat off to you. Brilliant outro.


Ok, this was so refreshing, and just an absolute pleasure to read and feed.
Sorry the feed is a bit rushed, I'm trying to get through stuff and not be overwhelmed but it's hard not being overwhelmed when
you're talking about doing the dirty deed with the daises. I loved all of this.
The way you go back and forth with the relationships and the way you describe the flowers and the situations the flowers are in,
makes imagery POP. It brings blooms to live. It brought me to life.
Great having you drop in pc _Lyrics.
Always great reading your work.
You always bring something new to the table in a way that's uniquely your own.
And this is no exception.

Great Read.


Thank you.

[osvaldojpalom1]

Okay now piece is something else. Love the flower concept you went with and its attachment to the female's characteristics. When first reading through I couldn't really immerse myself into what you had written until I got to these lines:

She did better, just needed someone supportive
broken potential she can grow from, unnoticed

I mean everything before that was expertly written, and by no means did it lack imagery. It just broke whatever barrier there was that was preventing me from diving into this world you created. I was no longer just wondering what flower you were going to speak about next. It allowed me to emotionally connect with the characters you were depicting, and in my second read through I was able to really flesh out the characters in my mind. That's the only critique I have for this piece.

Stunning piece with beautiful imagery and great narration on your part. Truly look forward to reading more of your work.