beer tits vs. late bloomer [Open For Votes]

[Late Bloom]

right ten lines im guessing regular diss battle? if not please advise me how to proceed.... and any ideas on dude date i'd rather get this over quickly but i am up for waiting a couple days to check in and then drop..... but maybe if checking are due in 24 hours and the battle due 24 hours after the checkin so that would make it this tuesday it will be open for votes and then leave two or three days to keep the post up until voters decide on a winner maybe before the beginning of next weekend... as in its sunday here so votes, battles, links are all due on friday before the weekend starts and again goodluck to everyone and dont forget to provide your two links before voting can take place.... other than that house rules 3 votes straight is a KO and first to five is TKO...... you get more points for ko... but ill let mods decide which parts it can mention just to provide the sight with a little be of ability...... lol... again good luck @beer tits

[beer tits]

Checking in.

12-16 lines to whomever posts firsts.

Due Tuesday.

[Notti]

Both battlers have 24 hours to vote on the champ match and contender match.

2 other links are also required.

-Failure to provide links and the battle will be closed.

[Late Bloom]

Okay thats fine ill have something on tuesday... reg diss battle of course..

[beer tits]

yo...

The early bird gets the worm, and you're retarded at best.
Now I get why they say late bloomers are last to leave the nest.
In your recent losses, you put up no fight with those gay writtens.
I saw your battle with Boston went about as well as Great Britain's.
Conservatives say you're an ill writer. I'm not concerned with that
Because Kellyanne Conway even agrees that's an alternative fact.
You obviously don't do your homework since your verses are ass.
But then again, you've already proven you can't keep up with Klass.
When my gym got jealous, I told them goal-setting's the solution
To how I'm dropping LB in March like a kept New Year's resolution.
He no-showed Notti. Odds of me wasting this rhyme are probably great.
Because his verses are like his first name: It's always gonna be late.

[Late Bloom]

so beer tits probably should just delete the whole thing from the beginning
cause you so weak i know you just joined up but didnt realize which grave he was digging
you going behave like you were dope when this his first battle finished here
and forgot to mention without question you aint wrote a dopebar in years
so keep claiming bloom is whack and start dissing me but hes going to leave here in a cemetary
so yeah try getting close to bloom but you aint understand how to post in the rap community
that was a decent bar even if this doesnt connect with the way i presented it
you whack and your just scared that im going to fuck up you behind acting all defensive
the left him no script he had bars but rb still strugglin to keep the site afloat
i can tell you werent happy with it but i aint have to waste no lines to get the knockout



Deleted other verse. C'Mon man, you can only put one verse per battle. - Notti

[beer tits]

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I've voted on everything, but you've only approved one of my votes.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...=1#post8851398

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Both battlers have 24 hours to vote on the champ match and contender match.

2 other links are also required.

-Failure to provide links and the battle will be closed.

I've voted on everything, but you've only approved one of my votes.

http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthre...=1#post8851398

[Notti]

The early bird gets the worm, and you're retarded at best.
Now I get why they say late bloomers are last to leave the nest.
not feelin this, him being retarded doesn't relate to being an early bird. which makes the rest fall flat for me
In your recent losses, you put up no fight with those gay writtens.
I saw your battle with Boston went about as well as Great Britain's.
im slightly slow asf in Social Studies and shit but im pretty sure this makes 0 sense, hence gettin a 0
Conservatives say you're an ill writer. I'm not concerned with that
Because Kellyanne Conway even agrees that's an alternative fact.
this ya best attempt at a punch, i'll say decent effort
You obviously don't do your homework since your verses are ass.
But then again, you've already proven you can't keep up with Klass.
i stand corrected, this is your best attempt at a punch and its actually fairly decent of a punch. wording kept this from being better, and it's slightly played
When my gym got jealous, I told them goal-setting's the solution
To how I'm dropping LB in March like a kept New Year's resolution.
once again, your heating up conceptually, but your wording is still lacking.. need to execute the wording to make these harsher
He no-showed Notti. Odds of me wasting this rhyme are probably great.
Because his verses are like his first name: It's always gonna be late.
decent attempt for closer

vs

so beer tits probably should just delete the whole thing from the beginning
cause you so weak i know you just joined up but didnt realize which grave he was digging
the flow was good, and much better then what i've been seeing from you
you going behave like you were dope when this his first battle finished here
and forgot to mention without question you aint wrote a dopebar in years
your jus making statements.. it may seem confusing, but you have to figure a way to be creative with your wording
so keep claiming bloom is whack and start dissing me but hes going to leave here in a cemetary
so yeah try getting close to bloom but you aint understand how to post in the rap community
this is going backwards from your other 2
that was a decent bar even if this doesnt connect with the way i presented it
you whack and your just scared that im going to fuck up you behind acting all defensive
not feeling this one either
the left him no script he had bars but rb still strugglin to keep the site afloat
i can tell you werent happy with it but i aint have to waste no lines to get the knockout
barely rhymes, if i force it too.. other then that, not much of a punch either

Overall: Later bloomer is definitely showing signs of elevating as this is his best verse by far imo. He started wit 2 punches that actually dissed his opponent, but he jus couldn't word them creatively. The punches came off as statements, like you was jus telling us some random shit, as opposed to you making it a creative punch that seems like you put some thought into it. After the firs 2 bars, the rest jus kinda fell flat, from not rhyming to no concepts at all jus really talking in a rap. Remember, you wanna think of an insult, even jus that he's ugly as fuck, and think of the most creative, aggressive way to call him ugly you can think of. Beer Tits actually showed a lot of potential in his verse, he started slow w./ 2 punches that i felt made no sense at all, but then he picked it up to developing solid concepts, they were jus poorly worded, or the concepts were played. Either way, a played concept is better then the 2 bars that made no sense so its progress.

v/ Beer Tits. I felt he had a better grasp in this battle of making the better punch

[Washed]

This battle was kind of a drag to read no disrespect felt late want very aggressive with his verse not a lot of punches connected with his opponent, beer had so,e good concepts the wording on iffy on some but he showed signs that he could be good if he works at it. Nothing really outstanding from either, not a line I read that stood out to me but I just feel beer took this for having the better mechanics and actually connecting on his opponent no hate my vote goes to beer tits

[KnowP]

In your recent losses, you put up no fight with those gay writtens.
I saw your battle with Boston went about as well as Great Britain's.
You obviously don't do your homework since your verses are ass.
But then again, you've already proven you can't keep up with Klass.
When my gym got jealous, I told them goal-setting's the solution
To how I'm dropping LB in March like a kept New Year's resolution.


v
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nada



didn't feel much of LB's verse tbh. my nigga, I'm going to inbox you. this has got to get better. real talk. Beer had some really good personal hits. Can tell he did his research and has been battling for quite some time with the creative flips. easy dubbb for him.

v. beer

[DzasteR]

The early bird gets the worm, and you're retarded at best.
Now I get why they say late bloomers are last to leave the nest.
Wording was off..but I get where you were going with this so it was alright
In your recent losses, you put up no fight with those gay writtens.
I saw your battle with Boston went about as well as Great Britain's.
Smooth – not sure how many would get this
Conservatives say you're an ill writer. I'm not concerned with that
Because Kellyanne Conway even agrees that's an alternative fact.
Nice
You obviously don't do your homework since your verses are ass.
But then again, you've already proven you can't keep up with Klass.
Pretty bland but ok
When my gym got jealous, I told them goal-setting's the solution
To how I'm dropping LB in March like a kept New Year's resolution.
No
He no-showed Notti. Odds of me wasting this rhyme are probably great.
Because his verses are like his first name: It's always gonna be late.
Not a good ender

Vs.

so beer tits probably should just delete the whole thing from the beginning
cause you so weak i know you just joined up but didnt realize which grave he was digging
This could have been a good set up if you played it better with your wording
you going behave like you were dope when this his first battle finished here
and forgot to mention without question you aint wrote a dopebar in years
Potential – work on your setups bro
so keep claiming bloom is whack and start dissing me but hes going to leave here in a cemetary
so yeah try getting close to bloom but you aint understand how to post in the rap community
Rhyme? Not certain how anyone can leave IN a cemetery – bar needs work
that was a decent bar even if this doesnt connect with the way i presented it
you whack and your just scared that im going to fuck up you behind acting all defensive
Again – something you really could’ve played on if your wording was better.
the left him no script he had bars but rb still strugglin to keep the site afloat
i can tell you werent happy with it but i aint have to waste no lines to get the knockout
not really feeling this

Beer had some better punches and a pretty decent flow. Late you got potential in your bars, but you gotta work on your wording, setups and punches....aanndd rhyme scheme. That verse didn't really do it for me but you had some potential and I'm sure with time you'll get better. Practice, practice, practice bro.

v/ Beer Tits

[Soule]

The early bird gets the worm, and you're retarded at best.
Now I get why they say late bloomers are last to leave the nest.
Cool
In your recent losses, you put up no fight with those gay writtens.
I saw your battle with Boston went about as well as Great Britain's.
lol
Conservatives say you're an ill writer. I'm not concerned with that
Because Kellyanne Conway even agrees that's an alternative fact.
not feeling it
You obviously don't do your homework since your verses are ass.
But then again, you've already proven you can't keep up with Klass.
lol
When my gym got jealous, I told them goal-setting's the solution
To how I'm dropping LB in March like a kept New Year's resolution.
not feeling it
He no-showed Notti. Odds of me wasting this rhyme are probably great.
Because his verses are like his first name: It's always gonna be late.
no

You had a couple gems in there for sure but I felt like the consistency was a bit rocky. Work on your wording to make your punches harsher.

vs.

so beer tits probably should just delete the whole thing from the beginning
cause you so weak i know you just joined up but didnt realize which grave he was digging
Doesn't connect at all. Not just the punch, but your first line has nothing to do with the second
you going behave like you were dope when this his first battle finished here
and forgot to mention without question you aint wrote a dopebar in years
How do you know this if you JUST said it's his first battle?
so keep claiming bloom is whack and start dissing me but hes going to leave here in a cemetary
so yeah try getting close to bloom but you aint understand how to post in the rap community
wtf no
that was a decent bar even if this doesnt connect with the way i presented it
you whack and your just scared that im going to fuck up you behind acting all defensive
NO
the left him no script he had bars but rb still strugglin to keep the site afloat
i can tell you werent happy with it but i aint have to waste no lines to get the knockout
DOESN'T EVEN RHYME

I'm about done trying with you fam...


Vote Beer for the better overall verse.

[The Law]

beer tits

The early bird gets the worm, and you're retarded at best.
Now I get why they say late bloomers are last to leave the nest.
Could have been a bit better, but still an okay way to open it.

In your recent losses, you put up no fight with those gay writtens.
I saw your battle with Boston went about as well as Great Britain's.
decent punch

Conservatives say you're an ill writer. I'm not concerned with that
Because Kellyanne Conway even agrees that's an alternative fact.
another decent punch to follow up with the last one

You obviously don't do your homework since your verses are ass.
But then again, you've already proven you can't keep up with Klass.
ehh, light punch here, bit simplistic with the concept you brought to the table

When my gym got jealous, I told them goal-setting's the solution
To how I'm dropping LB in March like a kept New Year's resolution.
another light one here

He no-showed Notti. Odds of me wasting this rhyme are probably great.
Because his verses are like his first name: It's always gonna be late.
okay bar

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late bloomer

so beer tits probably should just delete the whole thing from the beginning
cause you so weak i know you just joined up but didnt realize which grave he was digging
Not a good concept, and way too wordy

you going behave like you were dope when this his first battle finished here
and forgot to mention without question you aint wrote a dopebar in years
You just mentioned him just joining up in the first bar, now your mentioning it's his first battle, then you know what he wrote years ago? Doesn't make any sense. The bars need connection

so keep claiming bloom is whack and start dissing me but hes going to leave here in a cemetary
so yeah try getting close to bloom but you aint understand how to post in the rap community
Doesn't rhyme, terrible concept

that was a decent bar even if this doesnt connect with the way i presented it
you whack and your just scared that im going to fuck up you behind acting all defensive
Broken end multi, bad flow... no

the left him no script he had bars but rb still strugglin to keep the site afloat
i can tell you werent happy with it but i aint have to waste no lines to get the knockout
Again doesn't rhyme, "the left him no script" makes no fuckin' sense.

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MVGT: beer tits - obvious vote here. beer tits didn't have any true knockout punches but brought a decent, consistent verse. Definitely showed potential that he has more in the tank to come. late bloomer I'm not really sure your that bad or just fuckin' around and not even trying. Two bars didn't rhyme, some of your wording is off grammatically which breaks the flow and/or makes certain parts of the line make no sense. You also had a broken multi, presented it/defensive. Majority of your verse had a irrelevant first line to set up a flat punches that were unoriginal and had no creativity put into them. I know people have giving you advice before, I suggest you really go back and read over it and work on your bars. I'm not going to butter it up, the verse was absolute shit. Probably down the line of some of the worst I've read. So get to work on improving.