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G'L
DzasteR
script0rrr
10 lines
Deadline 48 hours from now
Make sure you check in - don't forget them vote links
G'L
check, GL too
check. i'll post soon - just made it to work.
gonna post up hopefully in the next hour or so.
Ready up!
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Script0rrr get ready to get run over – this is the start for the marathon line
Cuz I’m bout to deliver the quickest 1-2….…..faster than Amazon Prime
Hits are outrageous, I’ll make you pay – the damage is taking a toll
Facing a script?.…...more like I’ll just smother his face in a scroll
Suffocate him – calmly and nonchalant – I’ll knock this bitch into a debutante
And I’ll flip the script.… into an Arial so fast – like I changed the font
You no match for me - you have no ounce of skill, not a trace in hell
I'll expose you boy - and put script on display..............like HTML
I'm reaching new heights with my skill - moving up so fast, with you in stride
I know you reaching new heights too.............only to commit suicide
10.
I am ready
Punches flyin wild windmills like a big bitch fight
Sit tight write a couple quick lines, eyes shut big wide
Thisll be over before ya know ya gettin hit by
A mack truck wit raps stuffed to the seams now
Talkin bout he want it three rounds, please clown
This aint a licensed fight, this is a beat down
You aint gone reply itll be half a round. Me, now.
so dont elxplain y u got a long sleeve shirt under a short sleeve shirt
We all get the picture, its a short three words; dork; dweeb; nerd
An no u wont be eminem
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Shit forgot the 10th line
He went thru drug addiction, divorce an bein sued by his mom
DzasteR
Script0rrr get ready to get run over – this is the start for the marathon line
Cuz I’m bout to deliver the quickest 1-2….…..faster than Amazon Prime
this alright, cool concept, average punch though
Hits are outrageous, I’ll make you pay – the damage is taking a toll
Facing a script?.…...more like I’ll just smother his face in a scroll
ehh not really feeling this bar
Suffocate him – calmly and nonchalant – I’ll knock this bitch into a debutante
And I’ll flip the script.… into an Arial so fast – like I changed the font
Pretty cool concept, wording could have made the punch much better
You no match for me - you have no ounce of skill, not a trace in hell
I'll expose you boy - and put script on display..............like HTML
didn't come off smooth or roll off the tongue, overall punch and concept are decent though.
I'm reaching new heights with my skill - moving up so fast, with you in stride
I know you reaching new heights too.............only to commit suicide
okay way to close off a pretty consistent verse
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script0rrr
Punches flyin wild windmills like a big bitch fight
Sit tight write a couple quick lines, eyes shut big wide
not a punch, horrid bar
Thisll be over before ya know ya gettin hit by
A mack truck wit raps stuffed to the seams now
terrible, first line going off of the first bars rhyme scheme then you change it in the second line. not really a punch either
Talkin bout he want it three rounds, please clown
This aint a licensed fight, this is a beat down
no
You aint gone reply itll be half a round. Me, now.
so dont elxplain y u got a long sleeve shirt under a short sleeve shirt
wtf?
We all get the picture, its a short three words; dork; dweeb; nerd
An no u wont be eminem
doesn't rhyme
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MVGT: DzasteR - Sorry you wasted your verse against this trollish shit he dropped.
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again, script didnt really come with punches here. hes just making statments rhyme below average verse here. lacking creativity a nd personals. D came with some played concepts but his wording and execution was going he actually hit his opponent.. Overall this battle was a quick read nothing stood out to me from either side but D had the better verse
Get those voting links in or this battle will be closed.
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Script0rrr get ready to get run over – this is the start for the marathon line
Cuz I’m bout to deliver the quickest 1-2….…..faster than Amazon Prime
>>decent start
Hits are outrageous, I’ll make you pay – the damage is taking a toll
Facing a script?.…...more like I’ll just smother his face in a scroll
>>lol nice hit
Suffocate him – calmly and nonchalant – I’ll knock this bitch into a debutante
And I’ll flip the script.… into an Arial so fast – like I changed the font
>>dope np
You no match for me - you have no ounce of skill, not a trace in hell
I'll expose you boy - and put script on display..............like HTML
>>okay
I'm reaching new heights with my skill - moving up so fast, with you in stride
I know you reaching new heights too.............only to commit suicide
>>dope ending
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Punches flyin wild windmills like a big bitch fight
Sit tight write a couple quick lines, eyes shut big wide
>>nothin
Thisll be over before ya know ya gettin hit by
A mack truck wit raps stuffed to the seams now
Talkin bout he want it three rounds, please clown
>>nah
This aint a licensed fight, this is a beat down
You aint gone reply itll be half a round. Me, now.
>>just more n more tough talk
so dont elxplain y u got a long sleeve shirt under a short sleeve shirt
We all get the picture, its a short three words; dork; dweeb; nerd
An no u wont be eminem
>>horrible finish
V- D (by a landslide)
Script0rrr get ready to get run over – this is the start for the marathon line
Cuz I’m bout to deliver the quickest 1-2….…..faster than Amazon Prime
You got the idea of wording ya punches, you jus need better concepts
Hits are outrageous, I’ll make you pay – the damage is taking a toll
Facing a script?.…...more like I’ll just smother his face in a scroll
this was a decent attempt, would've been more aggressive and harder hitting had you referred to him taking a whole script "of painpills" to the face or some shit
Suffocate him – calmly and nonchalant – I’ll knock this bitch into a debutante
And I’ll flip the script.… into an Arial so fast – like I changed the font
I get it, this was kinda corny, yet creative at the same time. decent jab
You no match for me - you have no ounce of skill, not a trace in hell
I'll expose you boy - and put script on display..............like HTML
again, decent nameplay
I'm reaching new heights with my skill - moving up so fast, with you in stride
I know you reaching new heights too.............only to commit suicide
this is a miss for me
vs
Punches flyin wild windmills like a big bitch fight
Sit tight write a couple quick lines, eyes shut big wide
hell na
Thisll be over before ya know ya gettin hit by
A mack truck wit raps stuffed to the seams now
your tryna rap like your on a beat or something, rhyme scheme and flow is decent, but not for battle rap
Talkin bout he want it three rounds, please clown
This aint a licensed fight, this is a beat down
ehhh, best hit yet.. jab
You aint gone reply itll be half a round. Me, now.
so dont elxplain y u got a long sleeve shirt under a short sleeve shirt
We all get the picture, its a short three words; dork; dweeb; nerd
im confused, NO
Overall: One of you have a better idea on how to formulate a punch then the other. DzasteR actually took shots at his opponent, got creative with concepts, and even if he dropped a played punch, he worded it effectively enough to get the hit across. D shows lots of potential and I got him taking this pretty easily.
v/ DzasteR
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