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[YoungDagger]

Yo,

I just want some feedback for my latest bars. Please be honest and I'm open for som tipps
(I am not from an englsh speaking country so please also tell me some of my grammaticaly mistakes i made)

Started on a road, now climbing fuckin‘ stairs
People die behind my way but who the fuck cares

Success is on the top nearly there rock after rock
Shooting fake friends from the top armored with a hot glock

They came so far because of me left me behind and let me bleed
But I‘ll laugh last bitch that‘s a promise we gon see

You called us all a group but I was the fuckin
Slurping you‘re fuckin soup you don‘t have to feel the heat

So where are you know, can you see that black cloud
But I don‘t need you anymore now Im rapping for a crowd

Hear the lyrics feel the basse backstage purple haze
Dont gotta see your face now I walk the lonewolf way

Silver chain feel the fame take over the rap game
Music made me change I will never be the same

Let the loser behind ma ass now I‘m a rapper how it seems
Never going back in the past long live Street19

Copyright@Street19 2017

[_Lyrics]

Whats Up Street 19! welcome to Open Mic! I don't know how to say this in your language, but we all want feedback LOL and if you expect some you better be open to more than the tipps.. so your start was kind of rough! you had some awkward wordchoices and it was elementary to be honest
Silver chain feel the fame take over the rap game
Music made me change I will never be the same
that was probably your best bar, that had a bit of potential with the flow, other then that you need to expand your dynamics, bring your bars together because im not sure why your spacing each one of them out. and you need to grasp deeper fundamental writing mechanics, good luck. Thanks for the read!