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    Super Grand Heru SELF ACTIVATE's Avatar
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    ...........INFINITE............

    ...Topical contest verse written to the picture



    ................INFINITE...............



    "Choices, choices, which path shall I take?"

    As I embark on a life that surpasses the grave!

    From the coffin I raised my soul from dark like a spark in a cave
    To return once again with new karma to make as I reincarnate
    Thru the process of fate & I'm given 2 choices to choose & obey
    ... To play by the rules like the Buddhist and Saints ...
    ... Or to blaze my own path with the bluest of flames ...

    "In Lucifer's name I'll ruin terrains and burn them to ash
    In a nuclear rage 'til the future is plagued like Anubis uncaged
    When he came outta Hell in Methuselah's day!"


    Her music was strange ... the hissing of snakes
    Could be heard at the gate where Medusa did wait
    For new humans to take on a sinister date

    But before I engaged the Mistress of Hate
    I swam in the lakes near memory banks
    As the images rained from brainstorming the past
    I remembered the pain of a miserable land
    Then thought to myself as a spiritual man
    I could choose to do good ... it's all in my hands
    To manifest change like a shaman in trance

    Thus the road that I chose was an omen of light
    To shine bright on the globe on the coldest of nights
    Anointed by Christ as Osiris untied the bondage
    Of death that had shackled my mind in a castle of lies
    That once darkened my skies, but now I'm divine
    In the cycle again as I step thru the portal
    Where motals transcend; reborn as a shrub
    In the Forest of Men where Hi(s)story ends

    And new stories begin...
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    Again






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    Re: ...........INFINITE............

    This was really fuckin good, ill have to come back and give a proper feedback. I just wanted to let you know I read it and really enjoyed it.
    Big props.

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    bro, its crazy how u can switch up from a flex piece to something like this. this piece seems highly calculated. the infinite sign was cleverly alluding to the arch in the picture and the way you pieced together a piece about karma and life cycle was dope son. clean flow and high level lyricism per ur usual standards. an overarching theme i noticed in some of ur writings is this spiritual examination. it usually juxtapose with the underlying theme, in this case karma. you were even able to sneak in some flex while maintaining the concept. "In Lucifer's name I'll ruin terrains and burn them to ash
    In a nuclear rage 'til the future is plagued like Anubis uncaged
    When he came outta Hell in Methuselah's day!"

    yoooo! as always, a pleasure, my brother.

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    yooo Self activate!!! Man you really are one of my favorite writers here, LOL
    just the way you write, is really dope bro, i could read that shit forever, I swear. Man you've been writing on some high caliber lately and it just has kept the spark of writing creativity in me as well. Man you remind me soooo much of another writer i was a huge fan of a few years ago, blacketh. you both have a strange but strikingly similar way of wording your work pretty flawlessly. There was a lot of great thoughts put down in this little entry for a topical, but to be honest that potential was infinite! the last 16 you were fucking killing it man. i mean the memory banks, shaman in trance, you serious? hoooot fiya. thanks for another dope read!!
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    Super Grand Heru SELF ACTIVATE's Avatar
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    @Sammy : you already know. Nothing but respect and appreciation, fam.
    @_Lyrics : You're one of the guys who's work I always check for and enjoy so it's a cool to know the mutual respect is there. Also, I'm familiar with Blacketh. Dude was one of the illest writers I ever read that does this shit so I'm honored to even be compared. However, when I was over at RIA & digging through the SS and RB achieves I was always confused as to if Blacketh, Chris Black, and Mr. Black were all the same person.

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    Hello, Self Activate..good read..man..allow me to leave some feed...

    Overall - A really good written you have here. Really good poetic message, with really nice under-tones. I liked to grasp the concept of this piece; - was quite nice in a way. I enjoy this reincarnation piece..was quite lovely. My favorite part was the anubis..methuselah part..was poetic and riveting..niice one..man..I do think this is one of your best works..keep writing..I enjoyed this...

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