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    TBFL Title: Ill ScriptureZ (c) vs Truth Iscariot (Ready for Votes)

    @ill scripturez @Truth Iscariot

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    Re: TBFL Title: Ill ScriptureZ (c) vs Truth Iscariot

    Chickety Check
    Self Proclaimed...

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    Nigga tale it to Chaucer..

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    Re: TBFL Title: Ill ScriptureZ (c) vs Truth Iscariot

    ...i'll do what I can as I'm in another tourney on another site.

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    Re: TBFL Title: Ill ScriptureZ (c) vs Truth Iscariot

    ...2 Sides of Protest...

    As I'm walking... I'm contemplating purpose
    Our lives conjugated at the complicated surface
    Underneath, we lay empty as dominated persons
    The shit show was coming to this constipated circus
    Populated circles of anger marches with hate
    Primal rage reveals clear as we're partially ape
    Livelihoods in neighborhoods are targets we blazed
    My minds mirror reflected the hardships we faced
    Uneducated with low skills, lethargic in ways
    Employers find disheartening to mark up a raise
    "We have kids!" chants were barking enraged
    If we used this passion in work, habits occur
    Then gain steam & increase the margins of wage
    Snowflakes dust the heavily stepped boulevard
    Cold breath filling the air with words I knew were false
    Continued protesting uprising this diluted war
    Should've evaluated myself instead buying the newest car
    Gotta take that one on the chin like a suture scar
    Wanted to still buy my wife all this Louis Vitton
    Living above my means buried me in ruined shards
    & have the audacity to blame other human forms
    Questioning my sanity as my boots hit the pavement
    Overcome with embarrassment, stupid & naked
    This company helped my family move from a basement
    Took their kindness for weakness like a stupid disgrace
    I let a little unproven frustration, use me this way
    & views from complainants to choose what to say
    Arriving to my senses I break free from the uproar
    "You fucking traitor! Don't you want more?!"
    ...I do, but it has to be deserved to be given
    I'm an inmate & my worth is forbidden
    Accepting that fate from worst in the system
    ...So I headed back to work in a prison
    Last edited by iLL ScriptureZ; April 18th, 2017 at 12:32 PM Reason: typo

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    Protest

    We've gathered here rather than sit in distress
    Deciding to attack our duress
    We'll bash it to bits - answer those who transgress with a fist
    We're having fits, I only wince when cold winds blend with the snows chill
    Even the elements threaten to test my will
    Still I step with zeal. Towards beckoning quest,
    To keep the powers to be within check

    Inequalities set the people beneath the feet of the evil
    Carbon levels are lethal, our planet choked
    Smoke leaves bruises on the throat of the sky that it seeps to
    Squelching light. We fight to part this smog and end the age of darkness
    Our rage is armed with logic, we are Malcolm incarnate
    Aiming to maim decision makers that tarnish our lives
    Carnage is wise when disorder is the way of the world
    We've bargained hard to find only deception unfurled

    Eyes blind to fairness
    Minds binded, awareness a forgone thought
    Clarity chimes far in the distance - empty space is the Devils loft
    In allowing our oppressors rest, we've bested ourselves
    We've wrought our own burning dispair
    Impaired by sweet lies - stripped bare
    Our possessions denied....

    So we've fought as if life depended on it
    The entirety of our Hope suspended on it
    The means to right this wrong in scope
    This wrong - Of which it's been hard to cope

    Let Us
    Protest.
    Self Proclaimed...

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    Nigga tale it to Chaucer..

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    Re: TBFL Title: Ill ScriptureZ (c) vs Truth Iscariot (Ready for Votes)

    Ill, this was pretty dope. I liked the approach. Going from a hard working man to a convict. The transition was a smooth one. Wording was really nice, everything made sense and there wasn't any lines that were awkward to read. Flowed really well from start to finish. Overall, no complaints about this one. Just an overall good read bro.

    Truth, this was pretty good too. Not as smooth of a story tell as Ill's but still had value to the reader. It was a solid narration that told the story well. Just wish it was a bit more consistent like Ill's where you're actually seeing it through the eyes of a character rather than it being more like a documentary. That's just preference though, others might disagree. Your wording was really smooth, you have a very poetic style to your writing. Overall, good read bro. Couple things I would've personally changed but that's me.

    Vote Ill, just felt his was smoother, more consistent and told a better story. Dope battle though.
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