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    Belated 420 AI collab

    Nothings stopping me, I'm a ganja chief
    Rolled a piece, Blowing rings on a weed from the east
    The medicine I've offered I've given to a shaman
    Burning an herb with so many crystals that its shocking
    Pass it to the left, damn another's lit
    Stuck in a habit to overcome any Challenge that I get
    imagining what's next, when the futures forgotten
    Time exists if the brightest blend with Hues of the darkest


    Close my eyes, hypnotized and amused by a shark's fin,
    as I visualize the crystallized noose around my heart's stem.
    My lungs succumb and harden, I exhale the snowflakes,
    I'm numb, fucking retarded, I feel frail from the slow daze.
    I'm a snail in a slow race, ready to prevail in the gold blaze,
    sitting on my throne, hazed by the tale of a cold case...
    My lighter clicks and the flame burns beneath loudly,
    I smoke that shit proudly, as I dream of Maui Wowie.

    Lights low; eyes slow swollen...
    ice cold, bongs locked and loaded.

    And for all you who lobby... pretending to be Seraphims,
    denigrating smoke as it was heroin,
    I challenge you to defy my sky high philosophy,
    I'm on a 12 year addiction, so bitch there's no stopping me,
    get off of me, your laws are overbearing,
    I'm just trying get blazed mam, but thank you for caring!


    High times with never caring, now looking back at it
    I loved Mary Jane like modern day crack addicts
    Our first kiss was bliss, mesmerized, I couldn't resist
    Her various aromas, followed with nothing we did
    Raised plenty of kids, grew very big then blossomed
    Into Different strains of food for thought, was awesome
    Playing possum with wants or needs, with out her i'm lifeless
    Cinderella's my latest baby she completes me, she's
    ......Priceless.


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    Underline - Poeta Demonio
    Red - Kaotic Theory
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    Re: Belated 420 AI collab

    Yo this shit right here... FIRE ��
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    Awh Schnawp! No they didn't! Thas' ill son.
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    Damn Son Rapbattles Needs A LIKE Button
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    I just spent more than half an hour in this thread, mega feeding this piece
    and then all of a sudden my friggen screen went black!!!!!!!!
    I'm so annoyed. I don't have the heart to feed it again right now.
    Maybe tonight if my anger subsides.
    Just when I was about to copy everything '...in case...' the bitch shut down on me.
    I hate computers!

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    I'm so friggen angry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    What a waste of time!


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    Nothings stopping me, I'm a ganja chief
    Rolled a piece, Blowing rings on a weed from the east
    These first two intro lines are wonderful in that they draw the reader in, especially imo the bit that states 'Nothings stopping me...'
    Just from those three words I know I'm going to travel somewhere interesting. Those three words are a great opener _Lyrics.
    Nice rhymes also.

    The medicine I've offered I've given to a shaman
    Burning an herb with so many crystals that its shocking Slight typo with the word 'an', no biggie.
    Pass it to the left, damn another's lit
    Stuck in a habit to overcome any Challenge that I get Ugh...that's good. Good wording.
    imagining what's next, when the futures forgotten
    Time exists if the brightest blend with Hues of the darkest And even though this isn't hell bent on rhyme, it is
    where imagery and story line are concerned and that's such a bonus for a piece. Not sacrificing story line for
    rhyme is important and you're such a professional writer, you don't muck around in that respect.
    You write what you write, the way you want to write it, and I respect your work and you, for that.
    Whenever I read your work _Lyrics, I know I'll read something of quality. Something left of center.
    Something different and uniquely your own. This is yet another druggie piece, and yet...it's not to me,
    because from the first stanza, there's something there that makes me want to read on instead of sighing
    about reading another druggie piece. Well done _Lyrics.


    Close my eyes, hypnotized and amused by a shark's fin,
    as I visualize the crystallized noose around my heart's stem.
    Yep. That second line though huh? Grabs my heart string and yanks it.
    I mean the pictures in that line alone are gold. And I've not even touch on flow and rhyme yet.

    My lungs succumb and harden, I exhale the snowflakes,
    I'm numb, fucking retarded, I feel frail from the slow daze.
    But here I'll lust a lil over flow. It's stunning. The flow is wonderful.
    To me, the melodical rhyme you have here is so well done, it shines effortlessly.
    It's so easy to hear great flow isn't it? It just rolls off the tongue, slipping and sliding like butter.

    I'm a snail in a slow race, ready to prevail in the gold blaze,
    sitting on my throne, hazed by the tale of a cold case...
    Those internals are so warranted, as are the multies. Like I said smooth as butter.
    My lighter clicks and the flame burns beneath loudly,
    I smoke that shit proudly, as I dream of Maui Wowie.
    Yeah that's great. Really good. Streamline. Sleek. Aerodynamic rhymes.
    I love it.


    Lights low; eyes slow swollen...
    ice cold, bongs locked and loaded.
    Poeta Demonio, cool bridge crossing you over to another side. Cool bridge.
    Could have done with a comma after the word slow in the first line but...pft' why am I even bringing that up?
    Your pace is mesmerizing.


    And for all you who lobby... pretending to be Seraphims,
    denigrating smoke as it was heroin,
    I challenge you to defy my sky high philosophy,
    I'm on a 12 year addiction, so bitch there's no stopping me,
    There's nothing about this I don't like. Every line is measured in beats and scenes.
    The blocks you built make for a strong building. You keep it all cemented together by adding
    strong foundations with your words. There's nothing about it that's fallen apart.
    You capture me by writing with conviction and gusto. With confidence and not giving a crap.
    You capture me like that. Yeah I know I'm over passionate. People that have come to know me here
    know this about me. But why hide it? I love writing that moves me. You're moving me.

    get off of me, your laws are overbearing,
    I'm just trying get blazed mam, but thank you for caring!
    Ugh, I'm not drunk, nor stoned, just very appreciative for raw talent.
    Poeta Demonio, seriously, I really enjoyed that stanza you wrote. Good stuff.


    High times with never caring, now looking back at it The bit where you write '...now looking back at it...' has a nostalgic tone that's
    giving off sepia images in my mind. Also I've gotta say the words 'High times...' were clever and hit the spot. Classy and simple, but
    hit the spot.

    I loved Mary Jane like modern day crack addicts lol. Nice comparison.
    Our first kiss was bliss, mesmerized, I couldn't resist And this line is romantically fucked up in a way that soothes me.

    Her various aromas, followed with nothing we did Lovely imagery here also. Really well thought out descriptions.
    Raised plenty of kids, grew very big then blossomed
    Into Different strains of food for thought, was awesome Clever wording here with 'Into different strains of food for thought....'
    I really like the way you put that. I doubt I've heard it put like that before. You're refreshing to read. I've never read your work before
    and it's a real pleasure.

    Playing possum with wants or needs, with out her i'm lifeless
    Cinderella's my latest baby she completes me, she's
    ......Priceless.
    Beautiful outro. You gave it the imo, the golden halo it deserves with those last lines.
    I love an outro that end with a bang. And although it wasn't volcanic, it did make me melt.
    Your work was a pleasure to read and I'm really looking forward to reading more from you Kaotic Theory.


    Guys, I have to hand it to you. Even though you all had different styles, I'm not a believer that you all have to play uniform in order
    to get your point across. When different personalities come into play, I like to see that. And I feel you've all accomplished that.
    This is just my opinion and I've said many many times that at the end of the day my opinion doesn't mean diddly squat.
    But I hide nothing in feed. Even if I don't have time for the writer, I have time for any writers work and I'll never take it out on the work.
    I have nothing but respect for all written work here and take my hats off to you because I know its not easy to mesh as a unit to complete a whole.
    The most important components in a scene are the characters that populate it. Putting several different interesting perspectives into a scene and allowing
    those characters to gain momentum is like the Mentos and Diet Coke affect...you bring a reaction.

    I really enjoyed this piece. And I'm glad my feed got deleted yesterday because I gained more insight re-reading it today.
    Somethings I guess are meant to be.

    Great collab people.

    Your talent inspires me.

    And for that, I thank you.


    Also, I have to say, I'm sorry for the lack of feed where this piece is concerned.
    Please dont let work sit stagnate in the future. It will take your energy and momentum away and
    that would be a shame.
    Please know that you can always mention me and when I can, I'll feed it.
    I'd hate to know that this type of effort has been put in, especially when you've gone to the trouble of
    working back and forth on a collab, and it's not gotten the recognition it deserves.
    It's not you writers I feel sorry for. Its the writing. lol
    I'd hate for the writing to go unnoticed. So please feel free to mention me when and if you think something
    might get overlooked or ignored.

    Gentlemen, It's been a pleasure to read your work.


    Thank you.
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    Haha thank you! We relaly didn't go through any effort. It's more a freestyle collab.

    Same goes for you by the way! Feel free to mention me and I'll feed.
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    Bump....
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