Imagine

[Soule]

Imagine a day where you walk free of pain,
dreams remain but without the clink of chains.
Greed decays and the country believes in faith,
police refrain from beating minorities into graves.
Imagine a life without wanting to commit suicide,
repent... crucified as Jesus listens... brutalized.
Given fruit for flies, a fitted noose, bruises for eyes,
smitten hoops and ties as bridges drew in tides.
Imagine a war that finally ends the score,
when remorse finally begins to reform.
Friends report about the seasonal sports,
instead of demon swarms and funeral mourns.
Imagine a love that is more than enough,
warm to the touch, it can't be torn cuz it's tough.
Sworn and it's just, she adored you and blushed,
the floor wouldn't budge cuz you two endure every nudge.
Imagine waking up and never stressing out,
getting down from the bed means stretching now.
Settings bound by morning bliss, no hefty doubt,
no pressing clout against your skull, just a blessing now!
Imagine perfection as if it existed,
classic intentions and good action's retention.
Placid inventions without tragic remissions,
imagine division without a drastic collision.

Imagine equality, imagine peace,
imagine a world together in one piece.

[Kaotic Theory]

Hmmmm.....i like this dagel. Nice flow through-out this whole read. The imagery was good as we all know how fucked up todays world actually is you can actually imagine a much better place as i read each line. Nice emotion and great discriptive wroting here dagel.
Not bad.

[mal diction]

Imagine a day where you walk free of pain,
dreams remain but without the clink of chains.
Greed decays and the country believes in faith,
police refrain from beating minorities into graves.
Imagine a life without wanting to commit suicide,
repent... crucified as Jesus listens... brutalized.
Given fruit for flies, a fitted noose, bruises for eyes,

...

... i hate it when i'm getting intop a poem and someone makes me forget what i'm reading...

this is good though

[Soule]

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[_Lyrics]

Hey kingslayer! This was a pretty dope piece, I have to say the flow was definitely a strong suit here and the word choices were very well thought out in some instances. From the fruit for flies to funeral mourn I felt a little dip in the consistency and that dope good future vibe you had was shaking up a bit. Thought it really picked up after that and got pretty vivid and poetic, again a little dip in the just a blessing now line. It ended pretty dope though and the flow kept the syllables stacked which is a nice look, this was really positive, I liked it. Thanks for the read.

[143]

I like this. I like how you make this a "Shit vs Shinola" piece. Your vividness of the images presented from both points weaving almost like an curator presenting options for someone to make a decision for all of us. The in depth approach crafting with the wording making sure that rhythmically it sings as well as it schools the reader is something that you have always brought out and made it your unique crafting tool. Fuck technical shit, your a vet so it's always on point. This was brief and concentrated dopeness.....