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    Rebirth

    The pigeon morphs into a Phoenix,
    Pontius Pilate is pardoned by Jesus
    Ashes return like monarch butterflies
    To a cigarette growing from Pinocchio's lies

    Glowing momentarily, turning to truth
    Addicts and criminals become innocent
    Righting wrongs for crimes done by the heaven-sent
    All regrets go back in time, realign
    Into a determined mind inspired, an intelligent design
    Becomes chaos against the backdrop
    Of a man in an ivory tower, the lost
    Become found as birds hit the ground

    And all the power of godless men vanishes
    Into the hands of a God that never banishes,
    A tree shrinks into a seed amongst seeds planted by a farmer who still believes
    In the heavens and earth
    In death and rebirth.
    can I kick it?

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    Re: Rebirth

    I enjoyed this, short and sweet with slick diction and smooth rhythms

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    Re: Rebirth

    Thanks.

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    Re: Rebirth

    yeah, strong rhythm here. as far as overall content, the religious context was pretty apparent here. Ultimately i'm unsure on what exactly you are trying to say but this line was very nice:

    All regrets go back in time, realign

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    Re: Rebirth

    It's just a concept piece heralding rejuvenation.

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