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    I'm hard to love

    I've been in love before
    And before it ever happens again
    I'd rather you say that you hate me so I can take it on the chin.
    I ain't saying I'll make you or that I need someone perfect
    I just need someone to take time an feel like I'm worth it.
    Take a moment to understand I've spent a lot of time hurtin
    you need to read between the lines cuz my minds written in cursive.
    I've been apart of families that hated each other
    But I'm an only child always seeking a brother
    Now speaking of mothers
    I'll never find peace with another
    Cuz the only one I had is deceased an still I love her.
    She taught me the meaning of what loves supposed to be
    So if you can't match that dedication you'll never be close to me.
    I'm hard to love, but I'd like to think in the end
    That I'll give it back ten fold if you show me how again.
    How can I give the world to the person I think the world of?
    I got 2 kids so my heart? I can only give you a third of
    These feelings are unheard of Cuz I learned love was more than just actions
    It takes effort an patience and unparalleled passion.
    So before you try to know me just know that I got issues
    Cuz I can't love you from a distance so I'm content to just miss you.
    I'm in it for the long haul, I'm looking for marriage
    But you can't only love me you gotta love being a parent.
    I.P.

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    Re: I'm hard to love

    sorry this has been slept on dayday.
    its too good for that.
    ill hit it up maybe tonight.


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    Re: I'm hard to love

    I've been in love before
    And before it ever happens again
    I'd rather you say that you hate me so I can take it on the chin.
    I ain't saying I'll make you or that I need someone perfect
    I just need someone to take time an feel like I'm worth it.

    You've always had a knack for free falling rhymes dayday.
    I especially like the first line here. Short and sweet, it hits the mark well.
    No mucking around, no fluff, just straight to the point. I also like the rhymes soft like this.
    In pieces like this, you're not sacrificing your wording to impress with the beat. You've got the beat happening
    but you've got solid story as your foundation, and that's the way it should be.
    Take a moment to understand I've spent a lot of time hurtin
    you need to read between the lines cuz my minds written in cursive.

    That's really good dayday. That second line is beautiful.
    I like the way you say your mind is written in cursive.
    So artistic and very, very organic.
    I've been apart of families that hated each other
    But I'm an only child always seeking a brother

    This is cool also. It shows the despair of loneliness and how you believe
    you've found the reason.
    Now speaking of mothers
    I'll never find peace with another
    Cuz the only one I had is deceased an still I love her.

    Every time you write about your mother, you gut me to the core.
    On one hand I'm so happy you had someone like that in your life,
    on the other I'm sad you have to have her only in the spirit world now.
    But...I believe in that world, and I'd rather have that than nothing.
    Still, the way you talk about her would make every mother melt I bet.
    She taught me the meaning of what loves supposed to be
    So if you can't match that dedication you'll never be close to me.
    I'm hard to love, but I'd like to think in the end
    That I'll give it back ten fold if you show me how again.

    And this melts me. That you even know your own downfalls is lovely.
    That sort of self reflection cuts me. I love how raw you get when you write dayday.
    How can I give the world to the person I think the world of?
    Nice line.
    I got 2 kids so my heart? I can only give you a third of
    These feelings are unheard of Cuz I learned love was more than just actions
    It takes effort an patience and unparalleled passion.

    Damn, got that right. Hallmark would love you.
    So before you try to know me just know that I got issues
    Cuz I can't love you from a distance so I'm content to just miss you.

    You're killing me. Your sentiments run deep. You write with such ease.
    I'm in it for the long haul, I'm looking for marriage
    But you can't only love me you gotta love being a parent.

    And even though I like what you've written here, I wish the last word rhymed.

    My friend, you've done it again. Every time you drop something it's always heart felt.
    It always comes off as sounding true. It always shines. As do you.

    Another nice piece of work here dayday.
    Sorry for the late feed.

    Great Read.



    Thank you.


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    Re: I'm hard to love

    Yeah this is dope. Your flow in this is damn near flawless. And it's a real piece. Not some conceptual, technical, maniacally crafted HOF vying piece. You just let it happen and it worked. I'm not gonna go in depth cause I'm sure it would mirror similarity to whatever Emily wrote but I see you man. I really enjoyed reading this. It was ray to read but held a lot of weight. It definitely resonated with me

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    Sup. When you think about the word "lyrical" this piece embodies the meaning. The meaningfulness is off the charts and I'm sure almost everybody can dig that. People can relate to a piece you can tell has heart and that's the strength here. To nitpick the only real weakness I can see may just lay with the technical side of writing for those of us who like a more complex approach but I'm guessing that's not what you were aiming for to begin with, so meh. It was an enjoyable read and good to see you're still at it after all this time. Stay good.

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    This was deep good to when it come to love good to express yourself
    keep it up

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    Quote Originally Posted by YD View Post
    I've been in love before
    And before it ever happens again
    I'd rather you say that you hate me so I can take it on the chin.
    I ain't saying I'll make you or that I need someone perfect
    I just need someone to take time an feel like I'm worth it.
    Take a moment to understand I've spent a lot of time hurtin
    you need to read between the lines cuz my minds written in cursive.
    I've been apart of families that hated each other
    But I'm an only child always seeking a brother
    Now speaking of mothers
    I'll never find peace with another
    Cuz the only one I had is deceased an still I love her.
    She taught me the meaning of what loves supposed to be
    So if you can't match that dedication you'll never be close to me.
    I'm hard to love, but I'd like to think in the end
    That I'll give it back ten fold if you show me how again.
    How can I give the world to the person I think the world of?
    I got 2 kids so my heart? I can only give you a third of
    These feelings are unheard of Cuz I learned love was more than just actions
    It takes effort an patience and unparalleled passion.
    So before you try to know me just know that I got issues
    Cuz I can't love you from a distance so I'm content to just miss you.
    I'm in it for the long haul, I'm looking for marriage
    But you can't only love me you gotta love being a parent.

    You could definitely benefit from adhering to a set rhyme scheme, for example a pattern you go by or a rubric to follow when building your verses...... You've got a lot of potential to grow as a writer and you've been growing as far as I've seen. You always get better. This piece in general was personal and heart-felt and its saving grace for me was your open honesty, this is where the best of us comes out and we can really delve deeper into our true feelings on things. It's like being in sync with our spiritual selves and it really does benefit us when we're on this level. Atonement.... etc.... anyways good work buddy keep writing... learn a rhymescheme, seriously. Or i'll tear your shit up next drop.
    I'm a depressed happy cunt. Don't fuck with me. I love you, but I'm crazy.[/I]


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    Re: I'm hard to love

    I can relate and is a tough subject but most times like when you're at a disadvantage against the norm you get the extra help you need like when everything is confusing and people dating can be so fake out for superficial things or what ever; you can get that extra help or like the exaggerated comfort of like peace, security and comfort in my opinion. What do you need to be like your best person and what do you want from love? Like what would your perfect spouse consist of... make a list and don't stop until you find them. Like you said wanting to be a parent, you probably need to be able to trust and honesty stuff like that. And then if you do find a perfect hit to your list then hold on, nothing less then that is ever worth it and sometimes there is nothing but haters that rather keep you apart from that. Who even knows why but that's just facts!!!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Cody Phoenix View Post
    You could definitely benefit from adhering to a set rhyme scheme, for example a pattern you go by or a rubric to follow when building your verses...... You've got a lot of potential to grow as a writer and you've been growing as far as I've seen. You always get better. This piece in general was personal and heart-felt and its saving grace for me was your open honesty, this is where the best of us comes out and we can really delve deeper into our true feelings on things. It's like being in sync with our spiritual selves and it really does benefit us when we're on this level. Atonement.... etc.... anyways good work buddy keep writing... learn a rhymescheme, seriously. Or i'll tear your shit up next drop.
    Like this?

    Cuz the constant losses that caused this caustic nauseousness
    Are by far the hardest shit that I've ever been apart of... Shit
    Half of me is a narcissist the other part can't harness it,
    So I'm left with fire bars like an arsonist
    That needs more medication than a pharmacist
    I.P.

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    LOL that was hot...
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    Re: I'm hard to love

    Love the emotion in this very relatable topic. The flow of it was nice. Rhyme scheme and content was original but still this was a deep piece that alot of meaning. Very good work here man.
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    Amazing from the start to end. Inspiring, beautiful writing.

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    Re: I'm hard to love

    this was good; not from a technical or "diction" standpoint but from the honesty. much of the vernacular was very straight forward, not relying too much on creative language but sincere sentiments, and i thought it worked well. there were some nice linguistic manipulations like
    you need to read between the lines cuz my minds written in cursive.
    Cuz I can't love you from a distance so I'm content to just miss you.
    ...which serves as a cherry on top. i normally like vocabulary laced, imagery filled verbal acrobatic but this one didnt need all that. pretty cool man.

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