Absolutely love this photo, holy shit. Great choice.
Tea time.
You can see the truth as most people do
Its a tea to brew from a bunch of leaves that's loose
Steep a few, chill and stop to think
An elevated thrill on a Himalayan hill with some Darjeeling
This rhyme, the inner rhyme, the cadence within it. All of this sounded as if you wrote it and said it out loud to perfect its meter. Great writing here, Lyrics... You're constantly elevating and I love it.
Lessons that were seeking, destined as we're drinking
Thirsts were quenching, served for breakfast like the English
Twisted with a green tint, taste what's worth a sip
An amazing murky mix from an ancient herbalist
This is straight up fire rhyming and I love the consistency with inner syllabylic rhyme and working metaphoric language, this is what separates good from great, small writing elements implemented like this.
Brains can spill over, like shaking a soda
A voice from the froth in boiling pots shaped like pagodas
Prayed to the lotus like complacent marauders
Making a party outta what's gave to the Harbor
Consistent. Crisp language, sparks with creativity. I enjoy your use of words, the set ups for the next rhyme. It's unique, different. It's you being you.
Waves on the water, tides meet where I be
Find me with my mind free, tai chi with some chai tea..
Icy like power over will, a founding source of skill
Weakest villains, streaming systems, Powdered or distilled..
Second line didn't flow will, sounded awkward. This could've easily been fixed with different word choices... It just has too many words, gotta follow the word count sometimes.
Cut from our apathy
Our Thoughts are a batch of leaves
Our pot is a galaxy
Poaring a cup of reality
*Pouring (lol)
Cant handle me carelessly, I'm bubbling up
hot to the touch, believe youll need a cup in a cup.
This shouldn't work, but it did. I like this. Favorite line.
Little leaves rolled to silver needles
Many mingle in A big world of Zhen pearls and Clever people..
This rhyme would only work through colloquial-like accent, which I can do. I like this. Sounds good.
In the carribean with Asosee and a heart of a lion,
roads onto zion with Ag and positive ions.
I don't get this? The second line, I mean.
Mystical with Chemist functions, heads are sunken
Set to flow with Ethanol as their Liquid courage
Kombucha goes to ya, betcha thirsty in a sec
Smiling cause I'm Dialed in like early internet..
Ha dialed like early internet, this was a good part.... I can't get over the amount of creativity you have. This is an awesome piece, dude.
Tips are grown to be pruned, Never alone in your use
Staring at your glass- Spirits of the past in ceremonial rooms
Hopes for the youth, renewing goals
But see you'll be beautiful with a bit of Eleuthero..
Imagine this fairy tale, A passion you feel is real
Never an end to heavenly blends of Jasmine and chamomile
I can see why you're a text drop mod, this was dope... the closer hit on a soft rhyming note with eloquent language.