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    Misery Loves


    “Misery Loves”

    Stone cold stare
    but only when i’m not looking
    Petulant peripheral;
    Death panoramic just out of view
    Let talk for a little bit.
    “Sore” sparked .. Binding the miserable

    Her smile. her movements, Impeccable,
    though impetuous, permissible.
    Like adolescent angst; it's kind of cute, u know?
    That Radiant fury; Lava laden portrait
    Mona Lisa’s half smile.
    Lay my coffin.That's the end of me.
    Sordid pantomime for the office
    Crow feet danced the macabre
    My Infectious maybelline...
    queen, Smile, so fuckin gorgeous!
    Spark of the party. sparks soared between us. She's...

    Larger than life
    Larger than you
    Who are u, really?
    Sammy? Verizon’s sales floor general?
    Living lavish off commission residuals?
    Home then school then work. Rinse, repeat the vapid schedule
    Online rappin while she fraternize the celestials
    Then one day she messaged you.
    Riddling how she’s stuck on ritalin
    A fucked up relief as you smiled a second or two
    Not cause you’re glad she’s fucked in the head
    But the fact she’s of the planet proves
    She’s compatible with sad little you?

    Stone cold stare
    but only when i’m not looking
    Petulant peripheral;
    Death panoramic just out of view
    Let talk for a little bit.
    “Sore” sparked .. Binding the miserable
    Misery loves.

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    Re: Misery Loves

    I really like the "stream-of-consciousness" type style you have here. This piece resonated heavily with me, I couldn't tell you why though. I also appreciate the circular nature of the work. Misery does love

    This part is especially awesome:

    Quote Originally Posted by Sammy View Post
    Her smile. her movements, Impeccable,
    though impetuous, permissible.
    Like adolescent angst; it's kind of cute, u know?
    That Radiant fury; Lava laden portrait
    Mona Lisa’s half smile.
    Lay my coffin.That's the end of me.
    greetings netizens

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    Re: Misery Loves

    Quote Originally Posted by Sammy View Post
    Man, that pic is dope.

    “Misery Loves”
    ... a great many things.

    Stone cold stare
    but only when i’m not looking
    Petulant peripheral;
    Death panoramic just out of view
    Let talk for a little bit.
    “Sore” sparked .. Binding the miserable
    I'm really digging that "Death panoramic" line. It's similar to saying that death is ever present or that we are always but one footsteps away from the afterlife. See, I love talking and writing about death. Not on some emo shit. Just in general because it's like the most fascinating subject in the world for a multitude of reasons. Needless to say, I thought that it was a very dope line. Now as for all of its surrounding parts, well, uhmmm ... I though the language was really cloudy and I found myself having a difficult time trying to make sense of it all.

    Her smile. her movements, Impeccable,
    though impetuous, permissible.
    Like adolescent angst; it's kind of cute, u know?
    That Radiant fury; Lava laden portrait
    Mona Lisa’s half smile.
    Lay my coffin.That's the end of me.
    Sordid pantomime for the office
    Crow feet danced the macabre
    My Infectious maybelline...
    queen, Smile, so fuckin gorgeous!
    Spark of the party. sparks soared between us. She's...
    Your devices are very layered. Your verses almost always possess traces of repetition from stanza to stanza, be it in the form of mechanics, language used or a reoccurring theme that serves as some sort of subplot. It's very intriguing to decipher. Now, what I liked most about this section is the poetry you employed. It was both dark and airy at the same time. Almost like you wrote this while watching a Tim Burton film or envisioning yourself as Thanos writing a love poem to Mistress Death. This entire section was fire.

    Larger than life
    Larger than you
    Who are u, really?
    Sammy? Verizon’s sales floor general?
    Living lavish off commission residuals?
    Home then school then work. Rinse, repeat the vapid schedule
    Online rappin while she fraternize the celestials
    Then one day she messaged you.
    Riddling how she’s stuck on ritalin
    A fucked up relief as you smiled a second or two
    Not cause you’re glad she’s fucked in the head
    But the fact she’s of the planet proves
    She’s compatible with sad little you?
    I like how it seems you switched between literally writing about the picture, as if you're actually having a conversation with this Gaia-like figure and telling her about your everyday existence lol, to somehow morphing it back into a love story where we find you professing your overwhelming gratitude for finding a mate as crazy and imperfect as you are.

    Stone cold stare
    but only when i’m not looking
    Petulant peripheral;
    Death panoramic just out of view
    Let talk for a little bit.
    “Sore” sparked .. Binding the miserable
    Misery loves.
    Yes, she does.

    There are few writers around as fascinating as you are, Sam. This verse is but another example of the prowess you possess. The language is intoxicating, the story is captivating, and you're a master at setting the tone and the pace of the read. Also, your imagery is in a class all it's own.

    Dope!

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    Re: Misery Loves

    Excuse the grammar. The inability to edit my own post makes my reply read like I was drunk when I wrote it. I wasn't ... well ... not that much.

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    Re: Misery Loves

    self ur ability to pick up on nuances is fuckin uncanny man. Salute to u, sir.

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