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    Where have i been?

    i wander but i aint lost, im a boss
    through the muddy water n the frost
    im exhausted from nobody talks
    runnin mouths n losing ground
    we movin now around the south
    up end the north i pour it out
    im forced to play through draughts
    got it in so i had to remove doubts
    no room for failure so fix ya wig
    the time is now dont sip n swig
    i swear these folks think they BIG
    never did a bid or took a risk
    its easy math no flickin wrists
    minds gone n it shouldnt exist

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    Cunnilingus Oxymoron's Avatar
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    Re: Where have i been?

    I almost really dig that, some far out shit, but also a little too, ehh, self propped gangaster-ish for my liking in a poem. It has the ingredients for me to dig it though. That start line is very cool. But you kind of kill it by saying something silly like im a boss. I almost feel like you looked into oxymorons too. Or maybe you saw my name. But i vibe with where youre going. keep it up. Drop some more.
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    Re: Where have i been?

    Thank you. I really appreciate your input.

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    Re: Where have i been?

    For the simplicity I thought it was an amazing flow and to the point. As far as content, I agree... maybe in the future you expand on why you feel the current day is confused. I’d love to hear them thoughts.
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