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    All the Stars

    All The Stars


    Nah i feel it on me
    It felt real but then he let them do it to me
    He sat there and watched, he never waited, he wanted to be with everyone else
    While he left me in the field collecting war belts
    So just imagine what it FELT like waking up to a nightmare
    Knowing I respected less with that cold stare
    When I really wanted to spit
    Do he even know who he dealing with?
    It’s not the moral to the story
    I put my entire life to it
    Knowing he didn’t even break me off a little bit
    So what do I do? I just sit...
    Pacing... sick, cause I was still wishing he’d be it
    LOVE!! I thought finally found it
    But hey it’s better then the one wanting that dick

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    Re: All the Stars

    Message was here, the structure was not. Thing was, the lines threw this way off. So flow was choppy as hell. I dug the topic, but the structure killed any chance this had to be dope. Not hating, keep writing.

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    sick, bro. Holy shit. Absolutely captivating lyrics. never seen something so explosive, dynamic, and quintessentially mesmerizing! Keep it up!

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