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    When the Children Cry

    When the children cry


    V: What you want you never get
    So why is it in your heart so set
    Preset to go one way or the other
    Brother, brethren the cult of an odyssey together
    When all I ever wanted was to be a mother
    So the only one left out of my story is me
    Those roots were scarred but imbedded in that tree
    It used to be a nut too
    Seriously questioning if I should’ve been different upon due

    “What have we become, just look what we have done... all that we destroyed you must build again”

    ((Chorus))

    V: I tried my best who knows why I initially chose to pack a vest
    Always surrounded by the ones who never had a choice
    I guess in a way i wonder if it was to give them a voice
    My god your god it doesn’t even matter who
    Cause all those prayers for protection he answered too
    Born in a cell or still alone at two days old brought to me 14 thousand and 600 more cold
    And as every fathom unfold, as I was drowning I told

    ((Chorus))

    (Over guitar) v: Pay attention to the voices not yet conformed to society
    The ones who spit straight honesty
    They don’t know yet to need acceptance
    They don’t feel that real or suffer a penance
    Cause they just see what they see
    And tell it how it be
    But soon they’ll learn it goes one after another
    And all their candid will start to smother
    Maybe that’s why... cause there would’ve been another me
    In all my strength considered weak just waiting for the next life to justify free

    ((Chorus))

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    Re: When the Children Cry

    You knew the entire time and let them... you STILL fucking do. good! I don’t have any respect for you either - we’re even. See you in hell

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    Re: When the Children Cry

    Hmmm i want to say i liked this.... i think you couldve gone deeper i mean why chorus verse was this like a song er sumn??? Lol i liked that you stuck to the rules of text in the song or at least topical text i guess but it just felt like you were still trying to figure out what a topical was by putting a chprus and a verse shit in there just go with the piece man im not looking for songs.... i mean you can turn it into a song er whatever i guess whatever....

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    Re: When the Children Cry

    Thanks @Messiah I wrote it to the song so if you play it in the background the words line up with the quoted phrases and chorus and such. My inspiration always was music

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    @Messiah btw what are the topical rules?
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