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    This Room

    What is this place but another room nestled tightly and claustrophobically into another room crafted by the hands of another another another over and over again where the original maker's marks are long forgotten and invisible to this simple and easily manipulated eye, our eye, lost in the sway of the breeze of all directions -- directionless we --

    pushed at random pushed with purpose pushed with intent, rarely without condition;

    it is a condition, this room is a condition conditioned to a rotting disease and witness the checkered panels decaying into that everlasting fog the fade the fade the fade

    these are the windows closed, these are the strings tied to nowhere

    and so many questions and rejections and animosities frothing when the see is seen

    cut the strings cut the STRINGS cut THE strings CUT the strings, no, oh no, oh no, questions and rejections and animosities

    frothing ---------------- Fuck it,

    Cut the strings.
    “Those whom life does not cure death will. The world is quite ruthless in selecting between the dream and the reality, even where we will not. Between the wish and the thing the world lies waiting.”

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    Re: This Room

    dopeness, sir. the way you used repetition reminds me much of my fav poet, Sylvia Plath. Its used not simply for structure but to enhance the underlining idea.

    it is a condition, this room is a condition conditioned to a rotting disease and witness the checkered panels decaying into that everlasting fog the fade the fade the fade

    these are the windows closed, these are the strings tied to nowhere

    and so many questions and rejections and animosities frothing when the see is seen
    the nuances in that segment was impeccable. loved the shit out of it.

    checkered panels decaying into that everlasting fog the fade the fade the fade
    strings tied to nowhere
    awesome.

    more more more

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